The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

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The bar chart compares the proportion of weekly income spent by families across eight categoriesthe number of eight parts that families cost every week onin average in 1968 and 2018.

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It is obvious that in 1968 food was the highest amount of domestic cost, but the spending onin leisure became the top spending category after 50 years. Furthermore, the cost in housing and transport also experienced an increasealso experiencing a increase between 1968 and 2018.

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In 1968, foodthe food accounted forcoverd 35 percent of families' weekly bills, morethan three times higher than housing, clothing and footware which were the next largest categories at roughly 10% eachtied the second highest part about 10%. In 2018, the weekly domestic spending in leisurelesisure overtook spending on food, reaching around 22%the spending in food up to around 22%, while the shares of housing and transport grew from 10% to almost 20% and from about 8% to nearly 14% respectivelythe parts of housing, transport growing from 10% to almost 20%, 10% to approximately 15%.

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The other four parts of weekly family expenditurefamlies cost, without household goods which remained stable at around 8%stayed stable of 8%, fell slightlydropped lightly in this period of time. Fuel and power faced a decline from 6% to 4%. Clothing and footware had a descentdesecnt from 10% to 5%, whereas personal goods droppeddopped by a similar amount from 8% to 4%.

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Why this response received Band 6.0

文章成功概括了主要数据特征并包含清晰的总述,能较好地完成图表描述任务。但在语言表达上存在较多拼写错误、词汇误用及语法结构失误,在一定程度上影响了阅读流畅度。建议下一步重点加强词汇搭配与复杂句型结构的准确性训练。

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TA

任务完成度

7.0
Scoring rule

文章包含清晰的总述,准确涵盖了主要特征并进行了有效的对比。

Next step

注意细节描述中误将“clothing and footware”描述为1968年第二高(忽略了其与 housing 相同,且总体第二高未包含其他类别),需提高数据解读的精准度。

CC

连贯与衔接

6.0
Scoring rule

文章分段清晰,整体逻辑推进顺畅,但部分连接词和句式衔接略显生硬。

Next step

学会更自然地使用对比衔接词,避免在一段中堆砌过多带具体数值的并列句。

LR

词汇资源

6.0
Scoring rule

词汇使用涵盖了一定的变化,但拼写错误较多且存在表达不恰当之处。

Next step

修正拼写错误(如 footware、coverd、lesisure、desecnt)并规范词汇搭配(如用 average weekly spending 替换 numbers that families cost)。

GRA

语法多样性与准确性

5.0
Scoring rule

尝试使用了多种句式结构,但存在较多语法错误,如分词使用不当、主谓不一致及介词误用。

Next step

重点纠正时态与分词搭配错误,例如将 also experiencing 修正为 also experienced,并提高名词单复数和介词准确率。