The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.
Sample Response
The graph shows the average spendingexpense of high-income, average-income and low-income Britonsrich, middle-class and low income British on three types of fast foodfast food items, namely,namely - hamburgers, fish & chips and pizza, in 1990 as well as the consumption of these three fast foods between 1970 and 1990.
Overall, affluent British consumed considerably more fast foods than middle and low-income class people, and their spending was higher as well.
As the bar chartcolumn graph suggests, high-income Britons spent noticeably more on fast foodrich British ate noticeably more fast foods than the other two income groups in 1990. Their spending was more than twice as much on hamburgers (43 pence per person per week) than on fish and chips and pizza (both under 20 pence per person per week). The average-income groupaverage income group alsoalose preferred hamburgers, spending 33 pence, followed by fish and chips (24 pence) and pizza (11 pence). Finally, low-income earners spent lessappeared to spend less than other income groups on fast foods. They spent the most on fish and chipsFish and chips were their favourite fast food item followed by hamburgers and pizza. They spent about 17 pence per person per weekless than 20 pence per person each week on fish and chips and about 7 pence on pizzaless than half of that on pizza.
The line graph showsdelineates that fish and chips were twice as popular (300 grammes consumption per person) as hamburgers while the pizza was the least popular (less than 50 grammes consumption). The consumption of hamburgers and pizza increased overallsteadily from 1970 to 1990 while the intake of fish and chips declined over that same period.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is clearly organised and uses a varied vocabulary to describe both visuals, with generally effective comparisons of expenditure across income groups. Its main limitation is Task Achievement: the overview conflates spending with consumption, and the line graph coverage omits major endpoints and changes; prioritise an accurate overview and compare the principal trends, crossovers, and final figures from the consumption graph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers both visuals and reports several relevant figures, but its overview inaccurately links income groups to consumption and the line graph's major changes and endpoints are insufficiently developed.
Write a precise overview separating the bar chart from the time series, then support it with the key crossovers and 1990 consumption figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged in a clear sequence with effective paragraphing and generally logical progression from overview to expenditure and consumption details.
Make comparisons within the final paragraph more explicit so that the relationship between the three consumption trends is immediately clear.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and usually appropriate, although awkward choices and collocations such as 'average expense,' 'average income group,' and 'grammes consumption' reduce precision.
Use standard chart-reporting collocations such as 'average expenditure,' 'middle-income group,' and 'consumption in grammes per person.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex structures is used with generally good control, while occasional article, comparison, and noun-phrase errors do not impede meaning.
Improve accuracy in comparative patterns and noun phrases, especially constructions such as 'more than twice as much ... as' and units of consumption.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.
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