The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012.

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Sample Response

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The line chart delineates the percentage of femalewomen members of parliament in Germany, Italy, France, the UK, and Belgiumthe UK and Belgium over the 12-year period starting from 2000. Overall, Italy had the highest proportion of female parliamentarians in 2012. Belgium started with the lowest figure in 2000 and reached the same level as the UK by 2012. Germany recorded the highest percentageaccounted for the largest share from 2000 to 2008. While the percentage of female parliamentarians in Belgium rose sharply, the other four countries saw more gradual growth. In Germany, the proportion of female parliamentarians stood at 33% in 2000, and this figure grew to 37% in 2012. From 2000 to 20082010, Italy’s percentage of female parliamentarians was lower than Germany’s, rising from 27% to 33% in 2008.rising from 27% to 36%. Between 2008 and 2012,After 2010, Italy overtook Germany, with its proportion reaching almost 40%. France also saw an upward trend, from 25% in 2000 to 32% in 2012. The UK’s figure rose significantly from 17% in 2000,from 16%, peaked at 24% in 2008stabilised at 24% for a time, and then fell slightly to 23%. Belgium experienced the most dramatic rise; its share of female parliamentarians jumped from only 3% to 23% by 2012.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The response presents an exceptionally clear overview and accurate report of key trends, supporting main features with precise data. Information is logically organized and connected with smooth transitions and sophisticated sentence structures. To reach perfection, double-check minor precision details in initial values when paraphrasing statistical points.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

Key trends and main features are accurately selected, compared, and supported with precise numerical data from the visual prompt.

Next step

Maintain this high standard by ensuring every minor data point closely matches the exact visual markers.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0
Scoring rule

Paragraphing is logical and ideas progress smoothly with natural, varied transition words.

Next step

Continue using topic-focused body paragraphs that group relevant comparative data together clearly.

LR

Lexical Resource

8.0
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is varied, precise, and sophisticated throughout the response with no noticeable word choice errors.

Next step

Incorporate even more nuanced trend-describing collocations to further enhance academic tone.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0
Scoring rule

Sentences demonstrate a wide range of complex structures executed with consistently high accuracy.

Next step

Sustain this accurate use of varied clause structures and complex comparative grammar.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012.

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