The graphs below show the global robotics market during 2000 and 2025 based on sectors. Size of the global robotics market 2000-2025 (billions of dollars) Size of global robotics market by sector 2000-2025 (billions of dollars)
Sample Response
The diagrams give data on the global market of robotics in billion dollars from 2000 and give predictions until the year 2025. Overall, the market for robotics will significantly progress in the coming years and its industrial use will be predominant. According to the bar chart, worldwide robotics business in 2000 was less than 10 billion dollars and in the next decade, it almost trebled. The outreach of robotics in the global market is predicted to go higher than 40 billion in 2020. Finally, in 2025, this is estimated to jump to approximately 70 billion dollars. As the table data suggests, personal use of robotics was ignorable in 2000 but it reached to 4 billion dollars in 2015. It is forecasted that personal use of robotics technology will go as high as 9 billion dollars in 2025. Commercial use is also expected to rise and expand to 16 billion dollars in 2025 at which point industrial use of robotics would be the highest, 26 billion dollars to be exact. Finally, military use of this technology was 2 billion dollars in 2000 and it is projected to be 15 billion in 2025.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use plural unit Original: in billion dollars Suggested revision: in billions of dollars Why it matters: The unit phrase requires the plural form “billions” when describing the scale.
- 2. Use market verb Original: will significantly progress Suggested revision: will grow significantly Why it matters: “Grow” is the natural verb for an increase in market size.
- 3. Name the sector Original: its industrial use Suggested revision: the industrial sector Why it matters: The table reports market sectors rather than types of use belonging to the market.
- 4. Describe market size Original: The outreach of robotics in the global market Suggested revision: The size of the global robotics market Why it matters: “Outreach” does not express the monetary size shown by the chart.
- 5. Use precise trend verb Original: go higher than Suggested revision: exceed Why it matters: “Exceed” expresses the projected value more precisely and concisely.
- 6. Use accurate adjective Original: ignorable Suggested revision: negligible Why it matters: “Negligible” is the appropriate adjective for a value that was effectively zero.
- 7. Remove extra preposition Original: reached to Suggested revision: reached Why it matters: “Reach” takes a value directly without the preposition “to”.
- 8. Use standard form Original: forecasted Suggested revision: forecast Why it matters: “Forecast” is the more standard past participle in formal data reporting.
- 9. Clarify the timeframe Original: from 2000 and give predictions until the year 2025 Suggested revision: from 2000 to 2025, including projections for the later years Why it matters: The revision states the full period and distinguishes projected values more clearly.
- 10. Anchor the overview Original: in the coming years Suggested revision: over the period shown Why it matters: Referring to the displayed period is more precise than the viewpoint-dependent phrase “coming years”.
- 11. State visual relationship Original: predominant Suggested revision: the largest sector Why it matters: The table supports the precise comparison that the industrial category is the largest sector.
- 12. Correct the 2020 value Original: 40 billion in 2020 Suggested revision: about 42 billion dollars in 2020 Why it matters: The bar reaches approximately 42 billion dollars, and the monetary unit should be stated.
Suggested Rewrites
- in billion dollars in billions of dollars
- will significantly progress will grow significantly
- its industrial use the industrial sector
- The outreach of robotics in the global market The size of the global robotics market
- go higher than exceed
- ignorable negligible
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview and selects accurate figures from both visuals, especially the strong overall growth and the dominance of industrial robotics. Its main limitation is that comparisons are rather sparse and a few expressions are imprecise, including the claim that the market almost trebled by 2010. Prioritise clearer cross-year and cross-sector comparisons while using more natural data-description vocabulary and distinct paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
A clear overview and generally accurate key figures address both visuals, though some stages and comparisons are omitted and the 2000-2010 increase is overstated.
Compare more intermediate years and sector trajectories directly, and describe the rise from about 8 to 15 billion as nearly doubling rather than trebling.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information follows a sensible overview-to-detail sequence, but presenting the whole report as one paragraph weakens the visible organisation.
Separate the overview, total-market trend, and sector breakdown into clearly focused paragraphs while reducing repeated use of "Finally".
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the task, but several choices such as "outreach," "ignorable," and "reached to" are unnatural or imprecise.
Use conventional chart language such as "market size," "negligible," "rose to," and "is projected to reach".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful mix of simple and complex structures is generally well controlled, with only occasional errors in prepositions, reference, and sentence construction.
Refine preposition and clause control, especially in phrases such as "from 2000" and "reached 4 billion dollars," to make the report consistently accurate.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below show the global robotics market during 2000 and 2025 based on sectors. Size of the global robotics market 2000-2025 (billions of dollars) Size of global robotics market by sector 2000-2025 (billions of dollars)
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