The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
Sample Response
The volume of water consumed in three sectors:sectors- agriculture, industry and domestic use,domestic, in the twentieth century is showndemonstrated in the line graph. Meanwhile, the given table illustrates the differences between irrigated land and per-person water consumptionagricultural and personal water consumptions in Brazil and Congo in 2000. As the line graph showsrepresents, the highest quantity of water was consumedthroughout the period, throughout the given years, in agriculturefor the farming and it soared remarkably from 500 km3 to around 3000 km3 in 2000. Relatively little waterAn inconsiderable amount of water was used for the industrial and domestic usepurposes until the middle of the centurytill the mid of the century. From 1950 onward, industrial water use roseraised steadily to around 1,200 km³above 1000 km3 while domestic utilisation of water climbed more slowly to approximately 300 km3. The table shows thatBy looking at the table it is clear that Brazil had a population of 176 million176 million population and 26,500 km² of irrigated land26500 km2 irrigation fields compared with Congo, which hadcompare to Congo that had 5.2 million population and just 100 km2 of irrigated landarming lands in 2000. Consequently, the volume of water consumed by an average Brazilian was substantially higheroverwhelmingly greater than the water consumption of a person who lived in Congo.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies agriculture as dominant, tracks the three global trends with mostly accurate endpoints, and makes the central Brazil–Congo contrast clear. Its main limitation is incomplete and imprecise table coverage: population and irrigated land are mischaracterised, and the decisive per-person figures are not stated; prioritise a clear overview of all rising sectors and report the table's three measures with exact units and comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report covers both visuals, identifies agriculture as the largest user, and reports most major line-graph figures accurately, but the table comparison lacks exact per-person values.
State that all three sectors increased and compare Brazil's 359 cubic metres per person directly with Congo's 8, alongside population and irrigated land.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves logically from the line graph to the table, but its single-block presentation and some overloaded sentences weaken clarity.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview, global trends, and Brazil–Congo comparison, with one main comparison per sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range for trends and quantities, but awkward choices such as "inconsiderable," "irrigation fields," and "water consumptions" reduce precision.
Use standard terms such as "relatively little," "irrigated land," "water consumption," and "rose steadily."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted and meaning remains clear, though article, noun-form, comparison, and verb-choice errors recur.
Check countable constructions such as "a population of," comparative forms such as "compared with," and the distinction between "rose" and "raised."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
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