The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Sample Response
The two maps illustrate the transformation ofcompare the changes to the layout of Grange Park from 1920, when it first opened, to the present dayfrom 1920 when it first opened to today.
Overall, it is clear thatOverall, we can see that several facilities have been introduced to replace most of the original ones. While the footprint of the park remains unchanged, an entrance to an underground car parkan entrance underground car park has been attached to the southeast corner.
Looking first at the park's 1920 layout,Commencing with the original layout of the park, in the middle was a fountain, on the western side of which sat a stage for musicians. On the northern side, two rose gardens were located onat either side of the entrance, while a pond for water plants was at the northeast corner. A similar arrangement was seen on the southern side, where a rose garden and a glasshouse werewas situated west and east ofto the entrance respectively. Meanwhile, seatsSeats were placed along all edges of the park.
At present, the park's layout has been substantially changed, with the stage for musicians and the fountain having given way to an amphitheatre for concerts inon the western section and a rose garden surrounded by seats in the middle, and seats along the edges have been removed. Of the three rose gardens, only the northwest one remainsremain, while the northeast one has been replaced by a cafe and the southwestsoutheast one has disappeared. On the eastern side, an area for children's play and a water feature havehas taken the place of the pond and the glasshouse respectively. Finally, an entrance to the underground car park has been added to the southeast exterior of the park.northeast exterior of the park
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay presents a clear overview and effectively details the transformation of the park across both time periods. However, minor inaccuracies in location descriptions and a few grammatical agreement errors slightly diminish the overall precision. To improve, ensure accurate directional reporting based on the map layout and double-check subject-verb agreement in complex sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers all main features and key changes, though it contains minor spatial inaccuracies such as mislabeling the car park entrance location in the final sentence.
Cross-check compass directions and map locations carefully against the image before writing to maintain absolute data accuracy throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview is clear and information is logically organized into dedicated paragraphs for the past and present layouts.
Maintain consistent spatial sequencing when describing layout changes to make transitions between features even smoother.
Lexical Resource
A good range of map-specific vocabulary and flexible phrasing is used to describe modernizations and replacements.
Refine prepositions of place to ensure accurate usage in descriptive phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of complex grammatical structures is attempted, but frequent minor errors in subject-verb agreement and capitalization occur.
Proofread carefully for subject-verb concord and unintended mid-sentence capitalizations.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
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