The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
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Sample Response
The two plans illustrate the transformations indepict the layout of Grange Park at its opening in 1920 and its present-day configuration.
Overall, the park has undergone extensive redevelopment. A number of original garden features, includinggarden features including the fountain, pond, and severalfountain, pond and several rose gardens have been removed, though the two main entrances have been retained. Large sections of the site have been repurposed to provide modern recreational amenities for visitors.
Regarding the original rose gardens,Of all the original rose gardens, only the north-western one still exists, while the north-eastern and south-western counterparts have been removedcounterparts have vanished. The former stage for musicians and associated seating have been demolished and replaced by a larger amphitheatre for concerts. In the park’s centre, a compact rose garden encircled by seating has been constructed on the spot where the fountain once stood. Access is still available through the two original gateways on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street.
In the north-east, the old rose garden and pondIn the south-east, the old glasshouse has been replaced bymade way for a café and a children’s play area. Meanwhile, the former glasshouse in the south-eastformer pond for water plants in the north-east has been transformed into an expanded water feature, alongside which an entrance to an underground car park has been added.
Why this response received Band 8.5
The response displays an impressive command of sophisticated vocabulary and varied, error-free grammatical structures. The overview and paragraph structure are logically organized, facilitating effortless reading. The main area for improvement is Task Achievement, where spatial descriptions in the final paragraph confuse the locations of the new facilities relative to the original map features.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key changes are clearly identified and highlighted, though there is a minor location inaccuracy regarding where the café, children's play area, and water feature were built relative to the original glasshouse and pond.
Cross-check the orientation and spatial location of every new feature against the original map before finalizing the response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into well-defined paragraphs with seamless transitions and effective paragraphing throughout.
Maintain this high standard of logical grouping by ensuring spatial references within paragraphs strictly align with map coordinates.
Lexical Resource
The response features a wide, precise range of vocabulary suitable for map descriptions, applied naturally and accurately.
Continue utilizing precise location phrasing and variety when describing functional transformations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar and sentence structure are consistently accurate, flexible, and sophisticated across the entire text.
Sustain this level of flawless control and variety in future writing tasks.