The charts below show the number of working hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.
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The four bar charts illustrate the proportions of industrial workers across various weekly working-hour bracketsworking different numbers of hours per week in four European countries in 2002. Overall, 36–40 hours was the most common working-hour range in Denmark, Sweden, and the UKDenmark, Sweden and the UK, while 31–35 hours was the most common in France. Sweden had the lowest percentage of workers in the 46–50-hour group, while the UK had the highest proportion of workers working over 50 hours per week. In Sweden, 80% of workers worked 36–40 hours per week, compared to nearly 70% in Denmark.36–40 hours per week, followed by approximately 69% in Denmark. The figures for these two countries were much higher than those for France and the UK. The former was nearly 36%, while the latter was 50%. Except in France, 36–40 hours was the most common working-hour range. In France, around 39% of workers worked 31–35 hours per week, nearly roughly 3 to 4 percentage points above4 percentage points higher than the figure for the 36–40-hour group. Regarding longer working hours, the UK had the highest percentageThe UK had the highest percentage of workers working over 50 hours per week. This proportion stood at just over 20%The figure stood at 20%, nearly twice the figures for the other three countries. Along with Denmark (around 10%), Sweden recorded the lowest proportion in the 46–50-hour bracketSweden recorded the lowest percentage for the 46–50-hour group, at just under 10%at about 8%, while the figures for France and the UK were both around 20% (20% and 19%, respectively).both close to 20%.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The essay demonstrates excellent performance, accurately summarizing the visual data with a clear overview and appropriate key comparisons. The main limitation is a minor oversimplification when reporting data for workers in the highest hour categories, though accuracy remains very high throughout. To improve further, ensure all comparative figures reflect exact chart proportions with maximum precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response fulfills all requirements of the task by presenting a clear overview and accurate data points across all four countries.
Refine the precision of minor numerical observations, such as distinguishing exact percentages above 20% for long working hours.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information and ideas are logically arranged with a clear overall structure and smooth paragraph transitions.
Vary cohesive expressions slightly to avoid repeating patterns like 'the former... while the latter' across sections.
Lexical Resource
A wide and natural range of vocabulary related to data description is used accurately throughout the text.
Incorporate a broader selection of complex lexical phrases to describe proportion comparisons even more flexibly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures are varied and consistently accurate with minimal to no grammatical errors.
Maintain this high level of accuracy while incorporating additional complex compound structures to enhance stylistic variety.