The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.
Sample Response
The line graph compares the number of international tourist arrivalsforeign tourists arrival in five countries between 1995 and 2010. Overall, tourist arrivals in all five countriestourist arrival in these countries increased over time, and the USA and France received the highest number of foreign travellers during this period. The data showAs the data suggest, over 70 million international tourists visited the USAlanded in the USA in 1995 which was more than twice the figure for Francemore than double than that of France. Malaysia, in thatthis year, received around 20 million tourists while fewer than 10 million travellers visited Brazil and Egypt each. Tourist arrivals in the USATourists arrival in the USA gradually increased but a sharp rise occurred in Francecould be observed in the case of France where over 80 million travellers visited in 2010. Despite the USA being the most visited countrythe favourite among the tourists, France, as a destination, attracted many more visitorsbecame famous with the rapid increase of its tourist numbersits tourists' number. Moreover, approximately 50 million people went to Malaysia to spend their holidays in 2010 and this figure more than doubledis more than doubled in just 15 years. Finally, tourists arrival in Egypt slowly increased and remained above the figure for Brazilcrossed the tourists' arrival in Brazil as more than 20 million people travelled to Egypt in 2010 while this number was about 43 million fewer in Brazil.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report communicates the principal ranking and broadly describes the growth in arrivals with well-selected figures for the beginning and end of the period. Its main limitation is incomplete trend accuracy: US arrivals dip slightly after 2005, and Egypt remains above Brazil throughout rather than overtaking it. Prioritise tracing each line across all four years and remove unsupported interpretations before refining recurrent noun and comparison forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the two leading countries and uses relevant endpoint figures, but it misses the late US decline and incorrectly implies that Egypt overtook Brazil.
Track all four data points for each major line and report that the USA peaked in 2005 while Egypt remained slightly ahead of Brazil throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview to country comparisons, although the single-paragraph presentation and one unsupported interpretive sentence slightly weaken focus.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping the two highest series apart from the three lower series.
Lexical Resource
The response shows useful range in describing change and comparison, but several collocations such as 'tourists arrival,' 'landed,' and 'tourists' number' are imprecise.
Use natural statistical phrasing such as 'tourist arrivals,' 'received visitors,' and 'the number of tourists.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied sentence structures generally convey relationships clearly, but recurring noun-form, agreement, and comparison errors reduce accuracy.
Correct recurring forms such as 'tourist arrivals increased,' 'more than double the figure,' and 'the figure more than doubled.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.
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