The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.
Sample Response
The given graph compares the number of international tourists to five different countriesin 5 different countries from 1995 to 2010.
Generally speaking, the USA had the highest number of international tourists among these countries, and the number of tourists who visited France during this period increased rapidly. So, France as a tourist destination becamebecome more popular over time. Initially, in 1995, more than 70 million international tourists travelled to the USAtravelled the USA while just above 30 million tourists travelled to France. Brazil and Egypt had fewerless than 10 million tourists this year compared to just over 20 million touriststhe just above 20 million tourists in Malaysia. Over the period, the total number of tourists visiting these five countriesthe total tourists visited these 5 countries increased throughout the periodwith some slight fluctuations.
In 2005, tourists to the USA reached approximately 92 millionreached 90 million which was the highest among these countries. In this year, international tourists' number in France was about 65 million which was a sharp increase compared to its previous international tourists’ number. In Malaysia, Brazil and Egypt, the number of touristsIn Malaysia, Brazil and Egypt, tourists' number increased but did not exceed 40 million. Finally, in 2010, the numbers of international tourists visiting the USA and Franceinternational tourists' number in the USA and France intersected at about 90 million. By 2010Compared to the previous years, France recorded the joint-highest number of international touristsFrance gained the highest ratio of international tourists. Malaysia's figure also increasedThis number also increased in Malaysia and reached over 45 million which is almost double the 1995 figurealmost double compared to the data in 1995. Brazil and Egypt had the least number of international tourists among the given five countries, and in 2010, they both had around 25 million international tourists.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview, follows the main trends, and selects useful comparisons across the period. Its main limitation is data accuracy: France's sharpest rise is placed in the wrong interval, its 2005 figure is understated, and the final figures for Brazil and Egypt are overstated. Prioritise checking each stated value and trend against the graph before refining the language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and relevant comparisons cover the principal trends, although several figures and one trend description are inaccurate.
Verify France's change from 2000 to 2005 and report Brazil and Egypt's distinct 2010 values precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from an overview and initial values to later-year comparisons, with generally clear referencing.
Group the detailed figures more systematically by major and minor destinations to reduce repetition and sharpen comparisons.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing change, but recurring phrases such as 'tourists' number' and inaccurate choices such as 'ratio' limit precision.
Use natural data-reporting phrases such as 'the number of tourists,' 'rose to,' and 'was level with.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures communicates the information clearly, though agreement, article, preposition, and possessive errors recur.
Proofread noun phrases and verb forms, especially constructions such as 'travelled to the USA' and 'France became more popular.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.
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