The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Sample Response
Overall, the diagram shows that the island changes before and after. In the first diagram, the island was 250 metres long, and had several treeswhich has several trees in the west and eastin the western and eastern of the island. The beach was on the western sideis in the west side of the island. In the second diagram, the island was developed with numerous tourist facilitieswas constructed with a lot of tourist facilities, including 15 accommodation units, a restaurant, a reception, and a pier. The eastern accommodations are more than the western accommodations. The footpath is connected to the accommodationslinked with accommodation and the beach. And there can be allowed to swim in the sea near the beach. The vehicle track is linked to the restaurant, reception, and pier. There are two boats nearnearby the pier.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response successfully identifies key additions on the island, such as the accommodation units, restaurant, and pier. However, the overview is overly generic, and the text falls significantly short of the 150-word requirement. To improve, write a more descriptive overview summarizing the overall transformation and expand on comparative details to meet the expected word count.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features are covered, but the response is under-length and the overview lacks descriptive detail about the overall transformation.
Expand the overview to highlight the comprehensive redevelopment into a tourist resort and aim for at least 150 words by describing positional details more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a simple chronological structure, but sentence connections are basic and occasionally awkward.
Use a wider range of logical connectors and combine short sentences to improve the flow of information between map features.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic map labels, though word choices and spatial phrases are limited and repetitive.
Incorporate a broader variety of location vocabulary, such as 'situated in the eastern region' or 'encircling a central area'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent grammatical errors in prepositions, passive structures, and tense consistency hinder sentence control.
Practice using accurate prepositions of place and passive voice constructions suitable for describing structural changes.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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