The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
This response is estimated at Band 8.0. Can you write a better one?
Write yours and get clear feedback on all four criteria.
- Closest to official scores
- What to fix on each criterion
- Feedback in about 20 seconds · free
Sample Response
The charts present membership composition, loan distribution by category and total borrowing trends at Little Chalfont Library in 2016, alongside annual loan volumes from 2007 to 2016.
Overall, adults aged 18 to 64 constituted the majority of library users, while fiction for both children and adults together accounted for three quarters of all loans. Total borrowings followed a generally upward trajectory over the decade, culminating in their highest level in 2016, the same year when fiction titlesfictional materials dominated lending and adults aged 18 to 64 constituted the largest user demographicmiddle aged patrons were the primary borrowers.
Turning to membership details, 51% of registered users fell within the 18 to 64 age group, followed by children at 22%. Young adults aged 13 to 17 and seniors aged 65 and over represented 15% and 12%represented 12% and 5% respectively. Regarding borrowing patterns, adult fiction and children's fiction each comprised 38% of total loans. Adult non fiction contributed 13%, more than double the 6% recorded for children's non fiction. Young adult resources, children's DVDs and audio books collectively amounted to just 5%.
Annual loan volumes fluctuated between approximately 16,000 and 22,000 from 2007 to 2016. After peaking initially in 2011, figures dipped slightly in 2013 before recovering steadily. The final year saw borrowings reach their ten-year peakdecadal maximum, coinciding with the dominance of fiction and the highest proportion of adult membersthe prevalence of adult users.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The essay excels in logical organization and sophisticated language, presenting a clear summary of the major trends across all three visual elements. A minor data error occurs in the pie chart breakdown where specific percentages were misread, though the remaining data and overall features are reported accurately. Verifying all individual statistics against the source visuals prior to writing will ensure complete precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and highlights key details across all charts, though it misstates two pie chart figures.
Double-check numerical details directly against the legend to prevent accuracy errors in demographic data.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information and ideas are organized logically with a clear progression and effective paragraphing throughout.
Maintain this clear structural framework while ensuring transitions between distinct data sets remain seamless.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of vocabulary is used flexibly and precisely to describe data patterns and categories.
Continue utilizing precise data descriptors while ensuring every technical term strictly reflects the visual prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad variety of complex grammatical structures is produced with high accuracy and control.
Sustain this level of grammatical variety and punctuation control across all reporting paragraphs.