The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.
Sample Response
The bar graph compares the proportions of English men and womenratio of English males and females from different age groups who lived aloneindividually in 2011, while the pie chart shows the distribution of one-person households by number of bedroomsnumber of bedrooms they had. Overall, more British women lived alone when they got older and most of these one-person householdsseparately living persons' houses comprised one to three bedrooms. According to the bar chart, more British females, roughly 55%, lived alone than men didthan that of males in 2011. This is particularly true for older womenthe aged women since roughly 70% of them lived separately compared to fewer than 30% of menless than 30% males in the 65-and-over age groupsover 65 years old. The ratio of both genders living alone who were 50 to 64 years old in 2011 was exactly the same. However, younger English males were more likely to live alonepreferred to live individually more than their female counterparts. Around six in tenSix out of ten, on an average, were men who lived solo when they were younger, across the 16-24, 25-34, and 35-49 groups16-49 years old. The highest percentages of single males of this category was in the 35-49 groupwere between 35 to 49 years old while this ratio was highest for the women over 80 years old. The pie chart depicts that most of the single persons’ houses had one to three bedrooms and two-bedroom houses for such people was the highest, around 35%, exceeding the three-bedroom householdsapartments by roughly 6 percent. Very few households had four or more bedroomsScarcely they had larger houses with many rooms and around one-fourth of these homes had only one room.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview and selects most of the main gender, age, and bedroom patterns from both visuals. Its main weakness is imprecise interpretation: several figures are generalized across age groups, and household bedroom categories are described as rooms or apartments. Prioritize exact age-specific comparisons and use chart terminology consistently, while tightening several awkward grammatical constructions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Both visuals are covered with a clear overview and relevant comparisons, but some figures are overgeneralized and the one-bedroom value is inaccurately rounded to one-fourth.
Anchor every percentage to its precise age group or bedroom category and avoid claims that combine several distinct values.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from overview to the bar chart and then the pie chart, though the response is presented as one dense paragraph.
Separate the overview and the two visual descriptions into clear paragraphs and reduce repeated wording.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally appropriate, but several choices such as ratio, lived individually, and rooms are imprecise for the data.
Use proportion, lived alone, households, and bedrooms consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is used, but agreement, comparison, article, and word-order errors remain noticeable.
Check comparison structures and noun-phrase agreement, especially around percentages and age groups.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below shows the proportions of English men and women of different ages who were living alone in 2011. The pie chart compares the numbers of bedrooms in these one-person households.
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