The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.
Sample Response
The illustration outlines weekly house rents in three areas in London and the wage recommendation to afford those accommodations. As is obvious, more the room number in a house, more the rent and property renting in Notting Hill is expensive. As is presented in the table, Notting Hill’s house rent is the highest among the three given areas where a single bedroom house is usually rented at 375 pounds per week. It is advised that someone should earn over 98 thousand pounds in a year to afford such a living place in Notting Hill. Two-bedroom property in this area would cost £485 while it would be as high as £738 for a three-bedroom apartment. The renter’s yearly wage should be higher than 127 thousand and 190 thousand respectively to afford two and three-bedroom apartments. House rent at Regent’s Park is higher than that of Fulham but lower than the rent in Notting Hill. House with one, two and three bedrooms in Regent’s Park would cost 325, 450 and 650 pounds consecutively and to rent a house in this area someone needs an annual salary between 85 thousand and 170 pounds. House rent is in Fulham is cheapest, 215 for one and 600 for three-bedroom property and someone needs to have a yearly earning of over 157 thousand pounds to afford a three bedroom apartment and not less than 56,500 pounds to live in a one-bedroom flat.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Describe salaries accurately Original: wage recommendation Suggested revision: annual salaries required Why it matters: The table shows the salary required to afford each property rather than a recommendation.
- 2. Use precise property term Original: accommodations Suggested revision: properties Why it matters: Properties refers directly to the one-, two-, and three-bedroom rentals in the table.
- 3. Correct comparative structure Original: more the room number in a house, more the rent Suggested revision: the more bedrooms a property has, the higher the rent Why it matters: The correlative comparison requires the more and the higher structure.
- 4. State the highest area Original: property renting in Notting Hill is expensive Suggested revision: renting property in Notting Hill is the most expensive Why it matters: The superlative is needed because Notting Hill has the highest rents in all three categories.
- 5. Hyphenate property type Original: a single bedroom house Suggested revision: a one-bedroom property Why it matters: The compound adjective needs a hyphen, and the table refers generally to properties.
- 6. Use rent preposition Original: usually rented at Suggested revision: rented for Why it matters: A property is rented for a stated weekly amount.
- 7. Use exact salary figure Original: over 98 thousand pounds Suggested revision: £98,500 Why it matters: The table gives an annual salary requirement of exactly £98,500 for this property.
- 8. Name the property clearly Original: such a living place Suggested revision: a one-bedroom property Why it matters: The replacement identifies the accommodation being discussed precisely.
- 9. Add missing article Original: Two-bedroom property Suggested revision: A two-bedroom property Why it matters: The singular countable noun property requires an article.
- 10. Separate contrast clause Original: £485 while Suggested revision: £485, while Why it matters: A comma is needed before while when it introduces the contrasting clause.
- 11. Correct salary values Original: higher than 127 thousand and 190 thousand respectively Suggested revision: £127,500 and £194,000 respectively Why it matters: These are the exact annual salaries required for two- and three-bedroom properties in Notting Hill.
- 12. Use concise rent phrase Original: House rent at Regent’s Park Suggested revision: Rent in Regent’s Park Why it matters: The shorter phrase expresses the area comparison naturally.
Suggested Rewrites
- wage recommendation annual salaries required
- accommodations properties
- more the room number in a house, more the rent the more bedrooms a property has, the higher the rent
- property renting in Notting Hill is expensive renting property in Notting Hill is the most expensive
- a single bedroom house a one-bedroom property
- usually rented at rented for
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report identifies the two central patterns accurately: larger properties cost more, and Notting Hill is consistently the most expensive area while Fulham is the cheapest. It supports these trends with mostly correct rents and salary requirements, but omits some useful comparisons and once gives Regent's Park's upper salary without the thousands unit. Prioritise systematic, error-checked comparisons across all three areas and property sizes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and mostly accurate key figures address the task well, though selection is incomplete and one salary unit is misstated.
Include the omitted Fulham two-bedroom comparison and report Regent's Park's salary range accurately as £85,500 to £170,500.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses logically from Notting Hill through Regent's Park to Fulham, but one-block presentation and dense sentences limit readability.
Use an overview paragraph followed by separate detail paragraphs comparing rents and required salaries across the three areas.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of housing and comparison vocabulary is used, although repetition and several awkward collocations reduce naturalness.
Use concise terms such as weekly rent, annual salary required, one-bedroom property, and the least expensive area consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied comparison structures, but article, agreement, word-order, and sentence-construction errors recur while meaning stays clear.
Practise parallel comparisons and correct forms such as the more bedrooms a property has, the higher the rent and rents in Fulham are the lowest.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.
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