The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London. Weekly rents per property (£/w) Salaries needed (£/year)
Sample Response
The table compares the property rent per week in three areas in London and also shows the required salary to be able to afford to hire these properties. A quick glance at the table reveals that Notting Hill is the most expensive area among the three in terms of its property rent while it is comparatively cheaper to rent an accommodation in Fulham. Now turning back to the details, the weekly rent of one-bed property in Notting Hill is around £375 which increases to £485 for a two bedroom apartment and as high as over £700 for a three-bedroom house. To be able to support the property cost in Notting Hill it is suggested that someone has to earn from around £99,000 to £195,000 per annum. The house rent in Regent’s Park starts from £325 for a small house and ends at £650 for a big house. It is clear that the rent in this area is comparatively cheaper than that of Notting Hill and the salary that someone should earn to hire properties in Regent’s Park ranges from roughly £85,000 to £170,000. Finally, the property rent in Fulham is the cheapest among the three areas of London which vary from £215 to £600 for a one to three bedroom apartment. The earning requirement to live here also decreased and ranges from £56,000 to £157,000 per year.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural rent phrase Original: the property rent per week Suggested revision: weekly property rents Why it matters: The plural phrase is more natural when several property types are being compared.
- 2. Clarify annual salaries Original: required salary Suggested revision: required annual salary Why it matters: The table reports salary requirements per year, so the time basis should be explicit.
- 3. Use rent for property Original: hire these properties Suggested revision: rent these properties Why it matters: Properties are rented rather than hired in this context.
- 4. Remove incorrect article Original: an accommodation Suggested revision: accommodation Why it matters: Accommodation is uncountable here and does not take the article an.
- 5. Add article and form Original: one-bed property Suggested revision: a one-bedroom property Why it matters: The singular countable noun needs an article and the compound adjective is conventionally hyphenated.
- 6. Hyphenate compound adjective Original: two bedroom apartment Suggested revision: two-bedroom apartment Why it matters: Two-bedroom is a compound adjective before the noun.
- 7. Report exact rent Original: as high as over £700 Suggested revision: £738 Why it matters: The table gives an exact three-bedroom weekly rent of £738 for Notting Hill.
- 8. Use accurate collocation Original: support the property cost Suggested revision: afford the rent Why it matters: Afford the rent expresses the intended meaning more naturally and precisely.
- 9. State requirement directly Original: it is suggested that someone has to earn Suggested revision: the required annual salary ranges Why it matters: A direct construction avoids an unnecessary passive reporting phrase.
- 10. Correct salary range Original: £99,000 to £195,000 Suggested revision: £98,500 to £194,000 Why it matters: These are the exact salary figures shown for Notting Hill.
- 11. Name property accurately Original: small house Suggested revision: one-bedroom property Why it matters: The table categorises properties by bedroom count rather than by size.
- 12. Name property accurately Original: big house Suggested revision: three-bedroom property Why it matters: The highest Regent's Park figure refers specifically to a three-bedroom property.
Suggested Rewrites
- the property rent per week weekly property rents
- required salary required annual salary
- hire these properties rent these properties
- an accommodation accommodation
- one-bed property a one-bedroom property
- two bedroom apartment two-bedroom apartment
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear overview and accurately identifies the relative cost of the three areas, with well-selected figures for both rents and required salaries. Its main limitation is that some supporting categories, especially the middle property sizes outside Notting Hill, are omitted, while several phrases are awkward. Prioritise more precise property vocabulary and a slightly fuller set of direct comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate ranges capture the main hierarchy and relationship between rents and salaries.
Add a few direct comparisons of two-bedroom figures across the three areas to make coverage more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview through each area, with clear referencing and comparison.
Use distinct detail paragraphs or more deliberate grouping to make the comparative structure even easier to scan.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the task, although phrases such as hire properties and support the property cost are unnatural.
Prefer precise collocations such as rent a property, afford the rent, and required annual salary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is generally controlled, with a few article, agreement, and tense errors.
Check noun phrases and verb forms carefully, especially one-bedroom property, rents vary, and the earning requirement decreases.
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