The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

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Sample Response

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The line graph illustrates average monthly percentage changes in the prices of copper, nickel and zinc during 2014, relative to the previous month.

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Overall, nickel registered the most substantial monthly change early in the year, but its figures weakened considerably as the year progressed. Zinc underwent a prolonged downturn in the middle of the year before mounting a strong recovery from October onwards, while copper fluctuated throughout. Notably, there was one month when all three metals recorded declines simultaneously.

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Nickel's monthly change reached 6% in January, the highest across all three metals. It then fell steadily, falling to -3%recording a decline of 3% in June. A brief recovery in July was followed by a further dip to -2%a further drop of 2% in October, after which the figure levelled off at a 1% rise in both November and December. Copper began the year with a 2% increase, slipped into negative territory to around -0.5% in May and Juneat a 1% fall in April and May, recovered to hold at a 1% gain from July to September, before rising to around 1% in November and 1.5% in Decemberthen fell by 1% in November before ending the year with no change.

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Zinc peaked at a 3% rise in February. Its monthly change then weakened progressively, turning negative in Juneturning negative from April and dropping to -1% in Junehitting a 1% decline in June. This downward trend continued until October, when a sharp turnaround began, and zinc closed the year with consistent monthly gains, finishing at a 2% rise in December.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 9.0

The essay presents an exceptionally well-structured and fluent description of the graph, featuring a clear overview and highly sophisticated range of vocabulary and sentence structures. Information is organized logically, making comparisons natural and easy to follow. A minor limitation is slight inaccuracy in reading specific data points for certain months. To improve further, ensure absolute precision when interpreting detailed values and month labels from complex line charts.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The response presents a thorough overview and highlights all main trends clearly, with only minor inaccuracies in reading precise figures and month alignments.

Next step

Double-check numerical data against the axis and month labels to ensure every specific figure cited is completely accurate.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

9.0
Scoring rule

Information and ideas are arranged logically with effortless paragraphing and smooth cohesive linking throughout the description.

Next step

Maintain this exemplary standard of logical sequencing and seamless paragraph structure in future tasks.

LR

Lexical Resource

9.0
Scoring rule

An extensive and highly natural range of lexical items is used with complete control of collocation and precise terminology for data description.

Next step

Continue utilizing sophisticated vocabulary appropriately without over-complicating straightforward numerical details.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

9.0
Scoring rule

The writing demonstrates a wide variety of complex grammatical structures executed with consistent precision and flexibility.

Next step

Sustain this high level of grammatical accuracy and structural diversity across different task types.