The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
Sample Response
The yielded pie charts demonstrate how people access the news in Australia and Canada.
Overall, it can be seen that television and online news are the most prioritised way although not specified have the least in both countries.
For Canada, two fifth percentage of people like to access news by the TV while 36% of update themselves by digital platforms, which has the second-highest proportion. Print or tabloid medium has double percentage than radio has. In addition, 3% of Canadian get widow is not specified.
For Australia, online accessing news is just above a half percentage which has 16% more than has in Canada although, via television has roughly the same percentage as online has in Canada. Moreover, with 2% radio and not specified has similar people preference. The print has half proportion of access to daily updates than has in Canada.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove unnatural word Original: yielded pie charts Suggested revision: pie charts Why it matters: Yielded does not naturally modify charts in an introduction.
- 2. Use plural noun Original: Canadian Suggested revision: Canadians Why it matters: The percentage refers to a group of people, so the nationality noun must be plural.
- 3. Express category clearly Original: get widow is not specified Suggested revision: used an unspecified source Why it matters: The original phrase is unintelligible, while the replacement accurately names the chart category.
- 4. Use location preposition Original: For Suggested revision: In Why it matters: In is the natural preposition for reporting data about a country.
- 5. Fix noun phrase Original: online accessing news Suggested revision: access to online news Why it matters: The replacement forms a grammatical noun phrase for the method of obtaining news.
- 6. Use natural proportion Original: above Suggested revision: over Why it matters: Just over is the conventional expression for a value slightly greater than half.
- 7. Correct proportion phrase Original: a half percentage Suggested revision: half Why it matters: Half already expresses the proportion and does not take percentage in this construction.
- 8. Use percentage points Original: which has 16% more Suggested revision: which was 16 percentage points higher Why it matters: The difference between 52% and 36% is 16 percentage points.
- 9. Link contrast clearly Original: than has in Canada although, Suggested revision: than in Canada, while Why it matters: The replacement completes the comparison and introduces the following television contrast correctly.
- 10. Fix comparison structure Original: via television has roughly the same percentage as online has in Canada Suggested revision: television accounted for roughly the same share as online news in Canada Why it matters: The revised clause has a clear subject and compares the two proportions grammatically.
- 11. Name equal categories Original: with 2% radio and not specified Suggested revision: radio and unspecified sources, both at 2%, Why it matters: The replacement gives the two categories a grammatical parallel structure.
- 12. Fix agreement and meaning Original: has similar people preference Suggested revision: had equal shares Why it matters: The plural categories require a plural verb, and equal shares states the numerical relationship clearly.
Suggested Rewrites
- yielded pie charts pie charts
- Canadian Canadians
- get widow is not specified used an unspecified source
- For In
- online accessing news access to online news
- above over
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its accurate coverage of the principal proportions and cross-country contrasts, including the leading online figure in Australia and the paired lowest categories. The main limitation is that pervasive grammatical and lexical errors repeatedly strain clarity, compounded by the slight shortfall in length; prioritise rewriting each comparison as a complete, accurately formed sentence while retaining the sound data selection.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Despite being slightly under length, the response presents a valid overview and accurately reports nearly all major percentages and comparisons in both countries.
Meet the minimum length by adding one clearly worded comparison, such as Australia’s much stronger preference for online news over television.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, overview, and country-by-country paragraphs create clear overall progression, although faulty clause linking makes several comparisons hard to follow.
Give each main comparison its own sentence and use simple connectors such as ‘whereas’ or ‘compared with’ accurately.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonable range of chart vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations such as ‘two fifth percentage’, ‘update themselves’, and ‘online accessing news’ reduce clarity.
Use precise forms such as ‘two fifths of Canadians’, ‘accessed news online’, and ‘accounted for the largest proportion’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex comparisons are attempted, but frequent errors in clause structure, agreement, articles, and comparative forms sometimes impede understanding.
Write complete subject-verb clauses and check each comparison for correct forms such as ‘16 percentage points higher than’ and ‘half the proportion’.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
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