The graph below shows the figures for population distribution in the Northwest Region for 1900-2050.
Sample Response
The bar graph shows the percentages of rural, suburban and urban populations in the Northwest Regionpopulations in Northwest region in four years, includingfour different years including the projected population distributionprojection of population distribution in 2050. Overall, the percentage of the village-living population rapidly decreased over the time and a great percentage of people will live in city areas in Northwest region in the future. According to the given column graph, more than six out of ten peoplepersons in Northwest region in 1900 lived in rural areas while one out of ten lived in suburban areas. The percentage of urban populationurban area’s population was around 35% in thisaround 35 in this same year. Fifty years laterAfter 5 decades, the population distributioncirculation in this region changed substantiallygreatly changed and more than half of the population livedstarted living in urban and suburban areas. In 2000In the year 2000, six out of ten people in this region lived in urban areas while the remaining 40%the remaining four were split equally between suburban and rural areaswere in urban and rural areas. By 2050According to the projection in 2050, more than half of the population of the Northwest RegionNorth-western population will live in suburban areas while only 10% will remain in the rural areasvillage area. The remaining 35% of its population will livewould settle in urban areas.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers all four years and reports most percentages accurately, with the rise of suburban living and fall in rural living becoming clear through the details. Its main limitation is an imprecise overview and one confusing 2000 comparison that labels both remaining groups as urban and rural. Prioritise a sharper summary of the three contrasting trajectories, then use exact category names consistently throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most key values and changes are included accurately, but the overview does not clearly distinguish the suburban rise from the urban peak and later decline.
State that rural residence fell continuously, suburban residence became dominant by 2050, and urban residence peaked in 2000 before returning to 35%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows the years in a logical order, though some comparisons are compressed and the reference to the remaining groups in 2000 is unclear.
Use separate detail paragraphs for 1900–1950 and 2000–2050, with one explicit sentence comparing all three groups in each period.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for population change and projections, but expressions such as "village-living population" and "population circulation" are unnatural.
Use precise combinations such as "rural population," "population distribution," and "was projected to live" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures is generally controlled, although article, preposition, and reference errors remain noticeable.
Edit phrases such as "in the Northwest Region," "over time," and "the other four out of ten lived in suburban and rural areas."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the figures for population distribution in the Northwest Region for 1900-2050.
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