The pie chart gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.
Sample Response
The pie charts compare the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets, namely an average diet, a healthy diet, and a healthy diet for sport.
It is noticeable that sportspeople require a diet comprising a significantly higher proportion of carbohydrates than an average diet or a healthy diet. The average diet contains the lowest percentage of carbohydrates but the highest proportion of protein.
Carbohydrates make up 60% of the healthy diet for sport. This is 10% higher than the proportion of carbohydrates in a normal healthy diet, and 20% more than the proportion in an average diet. On the other hand, people who eat an average diet consume a greater relative amount of protein (40%) than those who eat a healthy diet (30%) and sportspeople (25%).
The third compound shown in the charts is fat. Fat constitutes exactly one fifth of both the average diet and the healthy diet, but the figure drops to only 15% for the healthy sports diet.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Avoid unsupported inference Original: sportspeople require a diet comprising Suggested revision: a healthy diet for sport comprises Why it matters: The charts show dietary composition and do not establish what sportspeople require.
- 2. Use neutral comparison Original: significantly higher Suggested revision: higher Why it matters: The chart supports a numerical difference but does not establish statistical significance.
- 3. Use percentage points Original: 10% higher Suggested revision: 10 percentage points higher Why it matters: The difference between 60% and 50% is 10 percentage points.
- 4. Use percentage points Original: 20% more Suggested revision: 20 percentage points higher Why it matters: The difference between 60% and 40% is 20 percentage points.
- 5. Match chart label Original: normal healthy diet Suggested revision: healthy diet Why it matters: The visual labels this category simply as the healthy diet.
- 6. Describe diet composition Original: people who eat an average diet consume Suggested revision: an average diet contains Why it matters: The chart compares proportions in diets rather than individuals' consumption.
- 7. Use precise term Original: compound Suggested revision: nutrient Why it matters: Nutrient is a more accurate label for fat in this dietary comparison.
- 8. Avoid time-change wording Original: the figure drops Suggested revision: the corresponding proportion is lower Why it matters: The charts compare diet types rather than showing a fall over time.
- 9. Match category name Original: healthy sports diet Suggested revision: healthy diet for sport Why it matters: This wording matches the category label used in the visual.
- 10. Complete the overview Suggested revision: Add that fat is equal in the average and healthy diets and lowest in the diet for sport. Why it matters: This would make the overview cover the main pattern for all three nutrients.
Suggested Rewrites
- sportspeople require a diet comprising a healthy diet for sport comprises
- significantly higher higher
- 10% higher 10 percentage points higher
- 20% more 20 percentage points higher
- normal healthy diet healthy diet
- people who eat an average diet consume an average diet contains
Why this response received Band 9.0
The response presents a complete, highly accurate account with a clear overview and well-chosen comparisons across all three diets. Its only notable limitation is the slightly imprecise label "compound" for fat, while the organisation and grammatical control are exceptionally strong. The highest-priority refinement is to sustain the same precision by using exact nutritional terminology and, where useful, distinguishing percentage-point differences from percentage increases.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response fully covers the visual, accurately reporting every proportion and highlighting the most important contrasts.
For maximum numerical precision, describe differences such as 60% versus 50% as percentage-point gaps.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses seamlessly from a concise overview to logically grouped carbohydrate, protein, and fat comparisons.
Maintain this focused paragraph structure while continuing to avoid unnecessary repetition of chart labels.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and precise overall, although "compound" is a slightly inaccurate label for a dietary nutrient.
Use exact nutritional terms such as "nutrient" or "macronutrient" when referring collectively to fat, protein, and carbohydrates.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence structures is used with consistently accurate grammar and punctuation.
Preserve this level of control while continuing to vary comparative clause patterns naturally.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.
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