The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future.
Sample Response
The maps compare an office building at the present and its future plan.
Overall, the building will undergo several changes, including extension on one side of the building, renovations of rooms and addition of new facilities.
According to the plan, the current grass area on the right of the building will be merged into the building. In the newly extended aea, there will be toilets and a coffee machine in the rear, and a meeting area with chairs in the front. On the left side of the building, the grass area will be replaced with an outdoor seating area with chairs.
Other changes are planned to take place in the major building. At the present, people access the building by the main entrance on the right side at the front; however, it will be relocated to the center. The four small buildings at the front will be split into two larger offices on both sides of the new entrance. At the back, the kitchen and canteen will be converted into offices, while no changes will happen to the storeroom.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use fixed phrase Original: building at the present Suggested revision: building at present Why it matters: The standard time expression is ‘at present’ without an article.
- 2. Add an article Original: including extension Suggested revision: including an extension Why it matters: The singular countable noun ‘extension’ requires an article here.
- 3. Correct spelling Original: aea Suggested revision: area Why it matters: ‘Area’ is misspelled in this phrase.
- 4. Use location phrase Original: in Suggested revision: at Why it matters: ‘At the rear’ is the appropriate prepositional phrase for a location within the plan.
- 5. Use location phrase Original: in Suggested revision: at Why it matters: ‘At the front’ is the natural prepositional phrase for this location.
- 6. Choose accurate noun Original: major Suggested revision: main Why it matters: ‘Main building’ accurately distinguishes the interior from the surrounding grass areas.
- 7. Use natural phrasing Original: access the building by the main entrance Suggested revision: enter the building through the main entrance Why it matters: ‘Enter through’ is more natural for describing how people use an entrance.
- 8. Correct the change Original: split Suggested revision: combined Why it matters: The four smaller offices are merged to form two larger offices in the future plan.
- 9. Name future layout Original: its future plan Suggested revision: the proposed future layout Why it matters: The map presents a proposed layout rather than a plan belonging to the building.
- 10. Use precise phrase Original: renovations of rooms Suggested revision: the conversion of rooms Why it matters: ‘The conversion of rooms’ describes the change of room functions more precisely.
- 11. Add the article Original: addition of new facilities Suggested revision: the addition of new facilities Why it matters: The noun phrase requires the definite article to match the preceding list structure.
- 12. Clarify the location Original: right side at the front Suggested revision: front right-hand side Why it matters: This ordering expresses the entrance location more naturally and concisely.
Suggested Rewrites
- building at the present building at present
- including extension including an extension
- aea area
- in at
- in at
- major main
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview and organizes most major changes logically, with accurate coverage of the extensions, room conversions, and retained storeroom. Its main limitation is incomplete precision: it overlooks the additional side entrance and sometimes labels rooms or spatial changes loosely. Prioritize checking every altered access point and using exact map terminology so the otherwise strong comparison becomes fully comprehensive and precise.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and accurately covers most major changes, but it omits the new side entrance and is occasionally imprecise about room arrangements.
Check both maps systematically for every altered entrance, room, and retained feature before selecting the final details.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is grouped logically into external extensions and internal changes, with clear progression and generally effective linking.
Use more precise referencing between present and future locations to make comparisons even easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficiently varied for describing spatial change, though errors such as 'aea' and awkward choices such as 'major building' reduce precision.
Use exact map terms such as main building, rooms, extended area, and remain unchanged, and proofread spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of simple and complex structures is used with generally strong control, despite occasional article and preposition errors.
Refine article use in phrases such as 'an extension' and avoid forms such as 'at the present'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future.
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