The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
Sample Response
The line graph demonstrates the changesvariation in the share price of Outokumpu companies fromOutokumpu companies for the period from January 2006 to December 2010.The figures are given in euros. Overall, it can be seen that share price fluctuated widely throughout the periodtimeframe with some peaks and troughs.
At the beginning of 2006, the share price of these companies stood at around €13around £13. It then rose overallThen it grew gradually during 2006 and reachedover the course of the first year hitting its first peak at just over €30 at the endjust over £30 at the end of 2006, the highest value shownwhich was the highest figure in the graph. For the period from the beginning of 2007 to the first half of2008, the figure experienced a slight fluctuation before it recorded its second peak of €30peak of £30.
SubsequentlyNevertheless, the share price of Outokumpu plunged after its second peak, hittingsecond peak hitting a low of around €7around £7 toward the end of 2008. The final two years saw substantial fluctuationsThe last two years witnessed a wide fluctuation in the share price between €7 and €17between £7 and £17. It ended the periodThe share price then finished the period at approximately €12approximately £12.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is logically organised and describes the main peaks, sharp fall, and later fluctuations with generally clear language. Its main limitation is task accuracy: it repeatedly reports pounds although the chart uses euros, while the overview is too general to convey the decisive rise, 2008 collapse, and lower ending level. Prioritise a precise overview and verify units before reporting figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report covers the major peaks, the steep fall in 2008, and the lower final value, but its overview is vague and every monetary figure uses the wrong currency.
State the dominant rise-then-collapse pattern in the overview and copy the euro unit accurately throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses clearly from the opening level through the two peaks, the collapse, and the final fluctuations, with effective paragraphing.
Use punctuation more carefully around participle clauses so that longer sentences remain easy to follow.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a suitable range of trend vocabulary, although repeated references to the share price and a few imprecise phrases limit flexibility.
Vary references to the measure naturally and choose precise expressions for the fluctuating middle period.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the changes clearly, despite minor spacing and punctuation lapses.
Proofread sentence boundaries, spacing, and commas after extended clauses to improve control.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
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