The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers.
Sample Response
The given line charts illustrate the passenger’s number in the Paris metro station between 6 o’clock to 22:00.
Overall, the citizen number is the peak on morning hours and in night hours additionally, late-night and evening time it is on the least.
At 6 in the morning time 100 passengers which number rises rapidly and after 2 and half hour it is 400 people. The number of people is dropping and 200 passengers on the station at 10 o’clock. Furthermore, between 12 to 14 has the same number of passengers on account of 300 which decline till 17 o’clock where it touches it dip, and it is 90 people.
2 hours later, the traveller number is the same as 8 o’clock time has, and it decreases 100 passengers in one hour and continues to plunge till 20:30 o’clock, the number is same as early morning 6 o’clock has and same as 22 o’clock, between couple hours it has 180 people.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use singular noun Original: charts Suggested revision: chart Why it matters: Only one chart is shown, so the noun must be singular.
- 2. Use natural collocation Original: passenger’s number Suggested revision: number of passengers Why it matters: The replacement is the standard expression for the quantity shown.
- 3. Use correct preposition Original: in the Paris metro station Suggested revision: at the Paris Metro station Why it matters: Passenger numbers are recorded at a station, and the proper name should be capitalized.
- 4. Fix time range Original: between 6 o’clock to 22:00 Suggested revision: from 6:00 to 22:00 Why it matters: A range with 'to' requires 'from' and consistent time formatting.
- 5. Repair plateau description Original: between 12 to 14 has the same number of passengers on account of 300 Suggested revision: from 12:00 to 14:00, the figure remains at approximately 300 Why it matters: The replacement supplies a subject and describes the near-level midday figures clearly.
- 6. Link the decline Original: which decline Suggested revision: before declining Why it matters: The participle correctly links the subsequent fall to the preceding clause.
- 7. Correct trough time Original: till 17 o’clock Suggested revision: to 16:00 Why it matters: The graph reaches its lowest point at 16:00 and rises again by 17:00.
- 8. Fix pronoun and phrase Original: where it touches it dip Suggested revision: when it reaches its lowest point Why it matters: The replacement uses the possessive form and a natural expression for the minimum.
- 9. Correct minimum value Original: it is 90 people Suggested revision: the figure is about 80 passengers Why it matters: The 16:00 point lies below 100, at approximately 80 passengers.
- 10. Spell out number Original: 2 Suggested revision: Two Why it matters: A number beginning a sentence should be written as a word.
- 11. Use consistent measure Original: the traveller number Suggested revision: the passenger figure Why it matters: The replacement is a natural and consistent label for the quantity on the graph.
- 12. Repair comparison Original: is the same as 8 o’clock time has Suggested revision: is almost the same as it was at 8:00 Why it matters: The original comparison has an ungrammatical final verb and omits the required time preposition.
Suggested Rewrites
- charts chart
- passenger’s number number of passengers
- in the Paris metro station at the Paris Metro station
- between 6 o’clock to 22:00 from 6:00 to 22:00
- between 12 to 14 has the same number of passengers on account of 300 from 12:00 to 14:00, the figure remains at approximately 300
- which decline before declining
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the graph’s principal peaks, trough, and midday pattern, and it follows the day broadly chronologically. Its main limitation is that several times and values are described inaccurately or unclearly, while pervasive grammatical errors make some comparisons difficult to follow. The highest priority is to verify each turning point against the graph and express it in short, controlled sentences with explicit times and figures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides an overview and covers both major peaks, the afternoon trough, and the midday plateau, but several timings and comparisons are inaccurate or unclear.
Anchor every key feature to the exact hour and value shown, especially the 18:00 peak and the later fluctuations.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence and broadly chronological description provide basic progression, despite strained links and overloaded sentences.
Describe each rise or fall in a separate sentence and use time expressions to show the sequence explicitly.
Lexical Resource
There is some useful trend vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate choices such as citizen number and on account of 300 impair precision.
Use conventional graph language such as passenger numbers, peaked at, fell to, and remained stable at.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in clauses, agreement, articles, and prepositions regularly make meaning difficult to process.
Build accurate simple sentences with one subject, one finite verb, and one time-value comparison before combining ideas.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers.
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