The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table illustrates where the police budgetthe money of police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a particular area in Britain came from, and the charts compare how the money was spent.
Overall, the national government provided the largest amount of money for the police budget in both 2017 and 2018, while other sources, such as grants, contributed the smallest amount to the police budgetinvested the least amount of money in the police budget in both years. The money from all three sources and the overall budgettotal for the budget increased slightly from 2017 to 2018. In addition, the majority of the money was spent on salaries for officers and staff, whilespent on salaries for officers and staff, while technology accounted for the smallest proportiontechnology cost the least amount of money in both years. However, from 2017 to 2018, the money distributed toon salaries reduced, while the money spent on technology increased.
Looking at the sources of funding, the national governmentIn detail, the national government provided £175.5m in 2017invested 175.5m pounds in 2017, which slightly increased to 177.8m pounds in 2018. The amount of money from other sources was 38m pounds91.2m 38, which also slightly rose to 38.5m pounds in 2018. The money from local taxes ranked in the middle in both years. It stood at 91.2m pounds in 2017 and 102.3m in 2018. The total amount of money given to the police budgetfigure of money gave to police budget was 304.7m pounds, before risingand then rose to 318.6m pounds.
The money spent on salaries accounted for three-quarters of spendingaccounted for 75% in 2017, which decreased to 69% in 2018. By contrast, the proportion of expenditureexpense on technology rose from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018. Furthermore, the percentage of money distributed to buildings and transport, which was 17%,remained the same from 2017 to 2018.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The summary successfully provides a clear overview and covers key trends across both the table and pie charts. However, data clarity is compromised by a noticeable numerical error in the body paragraph detailing income sources. To improve, carefully proofread all transcribed figures to ensure data accuracy while continuing to refine grammatical accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview comparing main sources and expenditures, but contains a data transcription error in the paragraph regarding income from other sources.
Double-check all reported numbers against the chart data to prevent accidental misstatements.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically into distinct paragraphs with clear progression from general trends to detailed data.
Vary cohesive phrases beyond repetitive structures like 'the money from' and 'the money spent on'.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally appropriate for describing charts and trends, though word choice can occasionally feel repetitive or slightly awkward.
Incorporate a wider range of financial terminology, such as 'funded', 'allocated', 'revenue', and 'expenditure'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex sentence structures is used, though punctuation and grammatical control are inconsistent in places.
Ensure complete verb structures in complex sentences, avoiding incomplete passive constructions such as 'money gave to' or 'money spent on'.