The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Sample Response
The pie charts illustrateThe pie chart delineates on the people aged 0-14, 15-59, 60+ in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projectionsestimate for 2050. Overall, in Yemen, the share of the children below 15 years is projected to declinewill declined in 2050. The share of people aged 15-59 is estimated to riserose to more than half of the total population.half of the pie. In Italy, the proportion of the 15-59 age bracket is projected to fall to under half of the population (46.2%)is going to increased to more than half of the pie, and the proportion of senior citizens aged 60 and over is expected to rise significantlysenior citizen over 60 years is expected to declined in 2050. In 2050, in both Yemen and Italy, the 15-59 age group15-59 aged bracket accounted for the largest proportion of total population, at 57.3% and 46.2% respectivelywhich are 57.3% and 46.2%. In Yemen, the share of people aged 15-59 rose from 46.3% to 57.3%. The share of the people aged 0-14 is expected to decline from 50.1%declined from 50.1% to 37.0%. In Italy, the share of people aged 15-59 tooktaked up the biggest proportion at 61.6%, which is predicted to decrease to 46.2% in 2050.which predict decreased to 46.2% in 2050. And the old people over 60 years, which rose from 24.1% to 42.3%. In comparison, Yemen is projected to have a younger populationYemen tend to younger due to the increase in the proportiondue to the increased of proportion of people aged 15-59. In contrast, Italy will have an older demographicAnd Italy tend to older due to the increasing sharedue to the increased of share of old people over 60 years.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response successfully identifies key numerical figures from both countries, but it includes inaccurate trend descriptions in the overview section. Cohesion and sentence flow are hindered by frequent grammatical errors, particularly incorrect verb forms and sentence fragments. Ensuring accurate overview trends and improving grammatical accuracy in passive and future structures should be the main focus for improvement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key details are reported accurately in the body paragraph, but the general overview misstates the projected trends for Italy's age groups.
Double-check key trends against the chart figures before writing the overview to ensure all main trends are described correctly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses a paragraph structure to separate the overview and details, but sentence connectivity is weak and includes incomplete sentence structures.
Use proper linking words and combine dependent clauses smoothly to form complete, logical sentences.
Lexical Resource
A basic range of vocabulary is used to describe percentages and age groups, though word choice and word formation errors recur throughout.
Focus on correct preposition use and appropriate noun forms, such as using 'an increase in' rather than 'the increased of'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent grammatical mistakes occur, especially regarding irregular past tense forms, modal verb structures, and passive constructions.
Review verb form rules after modal or auxiliary verbs, ensuring correct patterns like 'is projected to decrease' instead of 'predict decreased'.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.