The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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Sample Response
The pie charts compare the proportions of Italian and Yemeni citizens in three age groups in 2000 and projections for 2050.
It is clear that Yemen had the younger population in the year 2000, and the same is predicted for the year 2050. The populations of both countries are predicted to get older over the 50-year50 year period.
In 2000, justIn 2000 just over half the Yemeni population were aged 0 to 14under 14, compared to just over 14% of Italians in the same age group. Only a very small percentage of people in Yemen were over 60 at 3.6%, in contrast to nearly a quarter of the Italian population. The largest group for Italy was the 15-59-year-olds with just over 60% while Yemen had 46.3% of its population in this category.
Yemen’s average age is set to increase with the proportion of over-60sover 60s increasing by just over 2% and the middle group rising by 11%, leaving the youngest group with a decrease of nearly 13%. It is envisaged that by 2050 the proportion of people in Italy aged 60 and overnumber of people in Italy over 60 will jump to 42.3%, the percentage of those in the youngest bracket will drop to 11.5%, and the sharewill drop to 11.5% and the share in the middle category will decrease to 46.2%.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The essay presents a well-structured overview and selects all key visual data accurately with clear cross-country comparisons. Its vocabulary and sentence structures are varied and precise throughout the response. To improve further, integrate comparative language directly into the description of the 2050 projections rather than detailing each country in separate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response features a clear, accurate overview and thoroughly covers all main features and data points from both years.
Maintain direct side-by-side comparisons when reporting projected figures for both nations in the final paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information and key trends are logically organized into distinct paragraphs with smooth transitions.
Use linking devices that directly contrast projected changes between the two countries to enhance cohesive flow.
Lexical Resource
A wide variety of age-group descriptors and change-related vocabulary is used naturally and accurately.
Vary word choices even further by using precise synonyms for proportion and increase.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex grammatical structures is produced with high accuracy and control.
Incorporate complex comparative clause structures when contrasting future projections across both countries.