The following table gives statistics showing the aspects of quality of life in five countries.
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Sample Response
The table uses four quality-of-life indicatorsfour economic indicators to show the quality of lifestandard of living in five selected countries in 1982. Overall, the data show thatit can be seen that the quality of life in the USA was far higher than the other four countries. To begin, the USADelete, which is a developed country, had the highest GNP at 13,160 dollars per head. It also had a much higher daily calorie supplyintake and life expectancy, and the lowest rate of infant mortality, at only 12 per 1000 live births. Quality of life was much lower for the other four countries. The indicators for Egypt, Indonesia and Bolivia were fairly similar, with their GNP ranging from 570 to 690 and daily calorie supplies ranging from 2,086 to 2,950daily calories in the 2000s. Life expectancy was also almost the same, although Bolivia had a much higher infant mortality ratemuch worse infant mortality at 124 per 1000. Bangladesh had by far the lowest quality of life in all the indicators. Its GNP per head was approximately one percent of the USA’s. Its calorie intake and life expectancy were about half those of the USA, and its infant mortality rate was 11 times greater.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear overview and selects the most meaningful contrasts, supporting them with accurate figures and effective proportional comparisons. Its main weakness is limited precision in calling all four measures economic indicators and in grouping several middle-ranking countries somewhat broadly. To improve further, distinguish the social and economic measures accurately and add one or two sharper comparisons among Egypt, Indonesia, and Bolivia.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview, accurate figures, and well-selected proportional comparisons cover the principal features very effectively.
Label the social and economic measures accurately and compare the middle-ranking countries in slightly greater detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses clearly from the overview to the leading country, the middle group, and the lowest-performing country.
Use distinct overview and detail paragraphs to make the already logical grouping even easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
Comparative and statistical vocabulary is varied and precise, apart from describing all four measures as economic indicators.
Differentiate economic and social indicators explicitly and reduce repetition of quality of life where possible.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of simple and complex structures is handled accurately, with consistently clear sentence control.
Refine occasional noun-category phrasing while maintaining the strong control of complex comparisons.