The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
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Sample Response
The mapsThe yielded maps show an airport layout at presentin the present time and proposed changes next year after redevelopmentadvancement. It can be seen that a host of changes are planned for the future. The principal change will be on the northern concourses and terminal entrancesnorth side and entrance.
Currently, there are two divisions, arrivals and departures and have a single entrance; on the arrival side, after the hall have a passport control for customers, whereas on the departure side, in the hall where check-in is on the left side and cafe on the top right corner. Follow by the north way is security passport control. Additionally, passport control has some space, and the north side has a square-shaped gate areahas a square shape area. Inin the centre, there are eight gates, and the walkway ishas 8 gates as well walkway is on the left sideon left side
After development, departures and arrivals will each have two entrancesentrance numbers increased to two. On the departures sideOn departure side, check-in will take the place of the cafécheck to take the place of cafe while a bag-drop area will replace check-inwhereas, bag drop will check-in and the café will move to the south-west cornercafe will replace to south-west corner. On the arrival side, the area will be expanded to include car hirearea will expand and construct car hire. East wall ATM and cafe also take place.
Furthermore, passport control will be the same as now although ahead of it shop will construct. North way six gates remain the same; however, six will develop in north-east side and same will on the north-west side. Middle of it sky train build.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response is strongest when it identifies several concrete redevelopment features, including additional entrances, new passenger facilities, expanded gates, and the sky train. Its main limitation is that the overview is vague and several descriptions of locations, replacements, and gate numbers are inaccurate or difficult to follow. Prioritise a precise overview of the airport’s overall expansion, then group the current layout and future changes with accurate spatial comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies many planned additions, but the overview is limited and several details about relocated facilities and gate development are inaccurate or unclear.
State the overall expansion from eight to eighteen gates and the replacement of the walkway by a sky train, then report each relocated or added facility precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses a sensible present-versus-future paragraph sequence, although progression within paragraphs is weakened by run-on descriptions and unclear referencing.
Organise each layout by departures, arrivals, and the gate area, using clear subjects and one spatial change per sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant map vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations such as “yielded maps,” “north way,” and “will construct” reduce precision.
Use accurate location and change phrases such as “to the north,” “will be built,” “will be relocated,” and “will remain unchanged.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors with articles, verb forms, clause structure, and sentence boundaries often strain comprehension despite some attempted complex sentences.
Build complete subject-verb clauses and check articles and passive forms before combining ideas into longer sentences.