The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
Sample Response
The yielded maps show an airport layout in the present time and proposed changes next year after advancement. It can be seen that a host of changes are planned for the future. The principal change will be on the north side and entrance.
Currently, there are two divisions, arrivals and departures and have a single entrance; on the arrival side, after the hall have a passport control for customers, whereas on the departure side, in the hall where check-in is on the left side and cafe on the top right corner. Follow by the north way is security passport control. Additionally, passport control has some space, and the north side has a square shape area. in the centre, has 8 gates as well walkway is on left side
After development, departures and arrivals entrance numbers increased to two. On departure side, check to take the place of cafe whereas, bag drop will check-in and cafe will replace to south-west corner. On the arrival side, the area will expand and construct car hire. East wall ATM and cafe also take place.
Furthermore, passport control will be the same as now although ahead of it shop will construct. North way six gates remain the same; however, six will develop in north-east side and same will on the north-west side. Middle of it sky train build.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural noun phrase Original: The yielded maps Suggested revision: The maps Why it matters: “Yielded” does not naturally describe maps supplied for comparison.
- 2. Fix time phrase Original: in the present time Suggested revision: at present Why it matters: The idiomatic time expression for the current layout is “at present”.
- 3. Use task terminology Original: advancement Suggested revision: redevelopment Why it matters: “Redevelopment” accurately names the planned airport changes shown in the task.
- 4. Specify main changes Original: north side and entrance Suggested revision: northern concourses and terminal entrances Why it matters: The plan chiefly expands the gate concourses and adds entrances to both terminal sections.
- 5. Describe shape naturally Original: has a square shape area Suggested revision: has a square-shaped gate area Why it matters: The revised phrase identifies both the shape and function of the area.
- 6. Capitalise sentence opening Original: in Suggested revision: In Why it matters: This phrase begins a new sentence and therefore needs an initial capital.
- 7. Restore sentence structure Original: has 8 gates as well walkway is Suggested revision: there are eight gates, and the walkway is Why it matters: The clause needs an explicit subject and a correctly coordinated second clause.
- 8. Add article Original: on left side Suggested revision: on the left side Why it matters: A definite article is required before this specified side.
- 9. Use future tense Original: entrance numbers increased to two Suggested revision: will each have two entrances Why it matters: The future plan requires future tense and a clear distributive structure.
- 10. Fix terminal label Original: On departure side Suggested revision: On the departures side Why it matters: The plan labels this terminal section “Departures,” and the phrase needs an article.
- 11. Complete future construction Original: check to take the place of cafe Suggested revision: check-in will take the place of the café Why it matters: The clause needs the full noun “check-in” and the auxiliary “will”.
- 12. Clarify facility change Original: whereas, bag drop will check-in Suggested revision: while a bag-drop area will replace check-in Why it matters: A bag-drop facility replaces the current check-in area rather than performing check-in.
Suggested Rewrites
- The yielded maps The maps
- in the present time at present
- advancement redevelopment
- north side and entrance northern concourses and terminal entrances
- has a square shape area has a square-shaped gate area
- in In
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response is strongest when it identifies several concrete redevelopment features, including additional entrances, new passenger facilities, expanded gates, and the sky train. Its main limitation is that the overview is vague and several descriptions of locations, replacements, and gate numbers are inaccurate or difficult to follow. Prioritise a precise overview of the airport’s overall expansion, then group the current layout and future changes with accurate spatial comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies many planned additions, but the overview is limited and several details about relocated facilities and gate development are inaccurate or unclear.
State the overall expansion from eight to eighteen gates and the replacement of the walkway by a sky train, then report each relocated or added facility precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses a sensible present-versus-future paragraph sequence, although progression within paragraphs is weakened by run-on descriptions and unclear referencing.
Organise each layout by departures, arrivals, and the gate area, using clear subjects and one spatial change per sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant map vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations such as “yielded maps,” “north way,” and “will construct” reduce precision.
Use accurate location and change phrases such as “to the north,” “will be built,” “will be relocated,” and “will remain unchanged.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors with articles, verb forms, clause structure, and sentence boundaries often strain comprehension despite some attempted complex sentences.
Build complete subject-verb clauses and check articles and passive forms before combining ideas into longer sentences.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
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