The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
Sample Response
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts give information about the main reasons for study according to the age of students and the amount of support they gained from employers in terms of time off and fees.
Overall, it can be clearly seen from the graph that the main reasons for the study is for carrier perspective among all age groups, except over 49 years old group for the interest is the main reason for the study. Moreover, under 26 years of age group received more support from employers, whereas the age between 30-39 gained less support from employers in terms of time off and fees.
For under 26 years of age group, around 80% of students give the main reason for the study is the career perspective, while only 10% of students prefer to study for their interest. For the adults (between 26-29year age group) the main reason for the study is to make a carrier and remained students (15) choose to study because of their interest. The same trend is seen for the 30 to 39 age group in which around 58 students give the main reason behind study is a carrier purpose and 23 people choose it because of their interest.
The main Striking feature is for 40-49 age groups in which the main reason given by students for career and for their interest is the same(40). On the other hand, the students over 49 age groups choose the main reason for the study is for interest, and remains students selected it for their career. For the second graph, under 26 years age group received the most aid from the employer which is 65 and this support decreased when is reached to 39 after that the amount of support they receive from employers is increased.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix age-group phrase Original: For under 26 years of age group Suggested revision: For the under-26 age group Why it matters: The age range needs a definite article and a compound modifier.
- 2. Fix reporting structure Original: give the main reason for the study is Suggested revision: reported that the main reason for studying was Why it matters: The original combines two incompatible reporting structures and uses the wrong tense.
- 3. Use correct term Original: the career perspective Suggested revision: career development Why it matters: Career development accurately expresses the reason shown in the chart.
- 4. Fix age-group wording Original: For the adults (between 26-29year age group) Suggested revision: For students in the 26–29 age group, Why it matters: The revision forms the age range and introductory phrase correctly.
- 5. Correct career wording Original: to make a carrier Suggested revision: career development Why it matters: Carrier is the wrong word, and make a career does not match the chart label.
- 6. Fix quantity phrase Original: remained students (15) Suggested revision: the remaining 15% of students Why it matters: The revision uses the correct adjective and identifies the figure as a percentage.
- 7. Use percentage units Original: around 58 students Suggested revision: around 58% of students Why it matters: The chart reports percentages rather than counts of people.
- 8. Repair the clause Original: give the main reason behind study is a carrier purpose Suggested revision: reported career development as their main reason for studying Why it matters: The revision corrects the reporting structure and the misspelling of career.
- 9. Use percentage units Original: 23 people Suggested revision: 23% of students Why it matters: The plotted value is a percentage, not a count of 23 people.
- 10. Improve the phrase Original: The main Striking feature Suggested revision: A notable feature Why it matters: This removes unnecessary capitalization and the awkward superlative phrase.
- 11. Fix group reference Original: is for 40-49 age groups Suggested revision: concerns the 40–49 age group Why it matters: Only one age group is being described, and the revised verb fits the subject.
- 12. Add unit and tense Original: is the same(40) Suggested revision: was the same, at 40% Why it matters: The revision supplies the percentage unit and uses the past tense consistently.
Suggested Rewrites
- For under 26 years of age group For the under-26 age group
- give the main reason for the study is reported that the main reason for studying was
- the career perspective career development
- For the adults (between 26-29year age group) For students in the 26–29 age group,
- to make a carrier career development
- remained students (15) the remaining 15% of students
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the central age-related shift from career to interest and the broad fall-then-rise pattern in employer support. Its main limitation is uneven coverage: the first chart receives substantial detail, while the second is reported only generally, with some inaccurate age labels and unclear units. The highest-priority improvement is to balance coverage by adding accurate comparisons and percentages from the employer-support chart.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends are identified and much of the first chart is described, but the employer-support chart is underdeveloped and some categories and units are inaccurate.
Report several exact employer-support percentages and preserve the chart's age-group labels and percentage units accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable overview and logical chart-based progression, although some sentences are overloaded and connections become unclear.
Separate the final run-on sentence into distinct comparisons and give the second chart its own focused paragraph.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, but repeated misspellings and awkward choices reduce precision and flexibility.
Use accurate expressions such as career reasons, remaining students, and employer support, and proofread repeated key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and clause construction weaken control.
Build comparisons with complete clauses and check subject-verb agreement, especially when age groups or proportions are the subjects.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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