The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
Sample Response
The first graph showcases the main causes for education among scholars of diverse age groups whereas the second graph shows the level of support they get from their companies in terms of time off and financial help.
As per the graph, we can clearly see that with age the reason to opt for education for career decreases with time and in terms of interest intends to increase. Students under age 26 choose education for career purposes is about 8 times as compared to the students who choose education for interest.
To illustrate, eight out of ten people under age 26 years continue studies for their career whereas one out of ten under age 26 years opted for education for interest. With the increase in age, the motivation for studies is interest increases as seven out of 10 people in their fifties opted for education for this reason.
In terms of help from employer 65% of employee get help aged below 26 years whereas with time the trend tend to decrease till 33% aged between 30-39. People in the age range between 40 to 49, almost four out of ten employees get both kinds of help wheres the trend increases when age surpasses 49 where 42 per cent of people get financial aid and time off by their employer.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use neutral reporting verb Original: showcases Suggested revision: shows Why it matters: “Shows” is the standard neutral verb for describing chart information.
- 2. Use accurate wording Original: main causes for education Suggested revision: main reasons for studying Why it matters: The chart presents motivations for study, so “reasons for studying” is the accurate collocation.
- 3. Use chart terminology Original: scholars Suggested revision: students Why it matters: “Students” matches the population named in the chart, while “scholars” changes the meaning.
- 4. Use precise terms Original: the level of support they get from their companies Suggested revision: the level of support students receive from their employers Why it matters: This wording identifies the recipients and providers of support more precisely.
- 5. Correct age phrasing Original: people under age 26 years continue studies Suggested revision: people under 26 study Why it matters: “Under 26” is the correct age expression, and “study” is the natural verb here.
- 6. Add the noun Original: one out of ten under age 26 years Suggested revision: one out of ten people under 26 Why it matters: The comparison needs “people” and the concise age form “under 26.”
- 7. Keep tense consistent Original: opted for education for interest Suggested revision: study for interest Why it matters: The present tense is needed for a chart description and “study for interest” is more natural.
- 8. Use concise transition Original: With the increase in age Suggested revision: As age increases Why it matters: This transition expresses the relationship between age and motivation more directly.
- 9. Repair clause structure Original: the motivation for studies is interest increases Suggested revision: interest becomes a stronger motivation for study Why it matters: The original phrase combines two incompatible clause structures.
- 10. Match the age group Original: in their fifties Suggested revision: over 49 Why it matters: The chart category includes everyone over 49, not only people in their fifties.
- 11. Use present tense Original: opted for education for this reason Suggested revision: study for this reason Why it matters: A present-tense verb is appropriate when reporting the chart data.
- 12. Correct the phrase Original: help from employer Suggested revision: employer support Why it matters: The uncountable category is expressed naturally as “employer support.”
Suggested Rewrites
- showcases shows
- main causes for education main reasons for studying
- scholars students
- the level of support they get from their companies the level of support students receive from their employers
- people under age 26 years continue studies people under 26 study
- one out of ten under age 26 years one out of ten people under 26
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the two central age-related trends and supports them with several relevant figures from both charts. However, coverage of the middle age groups is selective, some employer-support values are imprecise, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors make several comparisons awkward. Prioritise a fuller, accurately quantified overview of the crossover and support pattern, then express each comparison in a clean sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main opposing study trends and the broad employer-support pattern are identified, but intermediate features and several figures are incomplete or imprecise.
Highlight the equal career and interest figures for ages 40-49 and report employer support accurately as about 65%, 50%, 35%, 38%, and 45%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a sensible chart-by-chart progression and clear paragraph divisions, although some long sentences and repetitive connectors weaken flow.
Organise each chart around one overview sentence followed by two concise comparisons, avoiding repeated whereas constructions.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, but frequent awkward choices such as scholars, causes for education, and intends reduce precision.
Prefer standard chart language such as students, reasons for studying, tends to rise, and employer support.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple meaning is generally clear, but frequent agreement, article, plural, and sentence-structure errors limit grammatical control.
Check every clause for a complete subject-verb structure and match plural subjects with plural nouns and verb forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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