The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
Sample Response
The line graph gives data on different turtle species in India between 1980 and 2012. The given turtle population index clearly showsstates that the leatherback turtle population fell sharplyleatherback turtles greatly reduced during the given period while the Olive Ridley species increased in numbermanaged to increase their population in India. Analysing the illustration reveal that there were 111 turtle species in India and the 1980 turtle population index considered 100 units and in this year, all turtles in India were at unit 100. However, over timeover the time, leatherback turtle indexleatherback turtle’s number dropped significantly and reached only about 60 index pointsreached to only 60 units while the reverse occurred forwhile an opposite trend could be observed in the case of Olive Ridley turtles. This species rose steadilycontinually expandedDelete, according to the index, till 1997 and then showed some fluctuations with a sharp drop in 2012 when it was about 127 index pointsjust over 120 units. DeleteFinally, the green turtle’s index indicates that substantial fluctuations occurreda rapid oscillation was visible in the population of this turtle. Over the years, its populationthis species's population, however, declined slightlyslightly dropped and it was just over 90 index pointsthey were just over 90 units in 2012. The index of all turtle species did not change significantly, though there were many ups and downs in this indexnumber. The important information that the diagram provides is the number of various types of turtle species. It was 19 for leatherback turtles, 38 for green turtles and 20 for Olive Ridley.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview of the main species trends and covers all four series, with useful endpoint comparisons. Its main limitation is uneven accuracy and interpretation: the all-species figure of 111 is misread as a number of turtle species, and some values and movements are imprecisely described. Prioritise accurate identification of what each legend entry and index value represents, then organise details into clear comparative paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the principal rises and falls and mentions all four series, but it misinterprets the 111-species aggregate and reports some movements and values imprecisely.
Distinguish the indexed population values from the species counts in the legend and select precise start, peak, and endpoint comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses from the dominant trends to the remaining series, although the single long paragraph weakens the grouping of related comparisons.
Use an overview paragraph followed by two detail paragraphs grouping the rising and declining series logically.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe trends and fluctuations, but several collocations are awkward, including greatly reduced, reached to, and rapid oscillation.
Use conventional data-description phrases such as fell sharply, reached 60, fluctuated, and remained broadly stable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the comparisons, but recurring agreement, article, preposition, and reference errors reduce control.
Check subject-verb agreement and noun referencing, especially in clauses such as Analysing the illustration reveals and this species ended.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
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