Charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006. Chart A: Films screened in the UK and Australia, 2001. Chart B: UK and Australian cinema admission, 1976 to 2006.
Sample Response
The bar chart presents data on the origin of films which were screened in Australia and the UK in 2001 while the line graph compares the number of cinema attendants in these two countries between 1976 and 2006.
Overall, Australian and Britsh theatres were dominated by American movies during the period, and more British went to movie theatres than their Australian counterparts between 1976 and 2005.
As the data suggests, more than 75% movies that were released in the UK theatres in 2001 were produced in the USA while 20% were locally made. Besides, almost one in ten movies screened in the UK was produced in Australia. A similar movie screening trend could be observed in Australia in this year where American movies commanded the theatres with a 65% ratio. Australians could watch fewer UK-made movies as only one in twenty British films made it to Australian halls. Interestingly, locally produced films in Australia were ignorable in percentage - as their screening ratio suggests.
It is obvious that more Brits enjoyed cinemas in a theatre than Australians did between 1976 and 2005. In 1975, over 100 million British watched movies in halls while this was just around 30 million in Australia. With some fluctuations, Australian movie-goers' number reached over 80 million after 3 decades. On the contrary, British cinema attendees dropped from 1977 to 1984, but afterwards steadily went up with some minor vacillations. After 30 years, almost 160 million British went to cinema halls- almost double than that of Australians.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use admissions term Original: attendants Suggested revision: admissions Why it matters: Attendants refers to people working at or serving a venue, not the number of cinema visits.
- 2. Correct spelling Original: Britsh Suggested revision: British Why it matters: The nationality adjective is misspelled.
- 3. Add people noun Original: more British went Suggested revision: more British people went Why it matters: British is an adjective here and needs a following noun to refer to people.
- 4. Correct end year Original: 2005 Suggested revision: 2006 Why it matters: The admissions chart extends through 2006, not 2005.
- 5. Add of Original: 75% movies Suggested revision: 75% of the movies Why it matters: A percentage before a specified count noun requires of.
- 6. Match chart measure Original: released Suggested revision: screened Why it matters: The chart reports films screened rather than film releases.
- 7. Remove article Original: the UK theatres Suggested revision: UK cinemas Why it matters: The generic plural phrase does not take the definite article in this context.
- 8. Use share Original: ratio Suggested revision: share Why it matters: Share is the appropriate term for a category's proportion of a market.
- 9. Use natural phrase Original: enjoyed cinemas in a theatre Suggested revision: went to the cinema Why it matters: The original phrase is not an idiomatic way to describe cinema attendance.
- 10. Correct start year Original: 1975 Suggested revision: 1976 Why it matters: The line chart begins in 1976.
- 11. Correct figure and noun Original: over 100 million British Suggested revision: around 100 million British people Why it matters: The chart starts at about 100 million UK admissions, and British needs a noun when referring to people.
- 12. Use natural noun phrase Original: movie-goers' number Suggested revision: number of moviegoers Why it matters: The of-phrase is the natural way to express this count.
Suggested Rewrites
- attendants admissions
- Britsh British
- more British went more British people went
- 2005 2006
- 75% movies 75% of the movies
- released screened
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview and makes several useful, mostly accurate comparisons across both charts, with the admissions trends particularly well covered. Its main limitation is incomplete selection from the film-origin chart, notably the sizeable share of other films in Australia, alongside some awkward word choices and grammatical slips. Prioritise covering every major category and expressing comparisons in more natural, controlled language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate main comparisons address both charts, although the substantial other-films share in Australia is omitted and some dates are imprecise.
Include the major omitted category and check every date and figure directly against the charts before finalising the report.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from an overview to separate discussion of the bar and line charts, with generally effective linking.
Use more precise contrast markers and avoid slightly abrupt or repetitive transitions between individual comparisons.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of topic vocabulary, but several collocations are unnatural, including references to films commanding theatres and percentages being ignorable.
Prefer standard chart-reporting phrases such as accounted for, admissions rose, and represented a negligible share.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentences is used successfully, though recurring errors with articles, comparison forms, and noun phrases reduce control.
Edit comparative structures and quantifier phrases carefully, especially forms such as more than 75% of films and almost double the Australian figure.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
Charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006. Chart A: Films screened in the UK and Australia, 2001. Chart B: UK and Australian cinema admission, 1976 to 2006.
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