The graphs below show the average monthly expenditure on children’s sports and participation in different sports in the UK from 2008 to 2014.
Sample Response
The two line graphs showline graphs depict average monthly spending on children’s sporting activities and the number of children who participated intook part in football, athletics and swimming in the United Kingdom between 2008 and 2014. Overall, monthly spending on children’s sports increased over time and football was the most popular sportsports among British children. According to the first line chart, about £20 million was spent per month20 million pounds was spent monthly, on averageon an average, in 2008 onfor British children’s sporting activities, and this amount continually increasedactivities which continually went up in the subsequent years. The expenditure in 2012 reached about 27 million pounds2011 reached to over 25 million pounds and in 2014, spending reachedthis cost was as high as approximately 32 million pounds32 million pounds approximately. In 2008, roughly 8 million children participated in football while 1 to 2 million in swimming and athletics, making football the most widely played sports in the UK. However, the participation in swimming increasedpopularity of swimming grew and in 2014, roughlyin 2014 roughly 3.8 million children took upparticipants took this activity. After a sharp rise and slight fallWith a steady rise in popularity, athletics was taken up by nearly 5 million children in 2014. Football participants range from 8.5 to 9.5 million during this period, considerably higher than the participants in the other two activities. It is worth notingnoticing that more children participated in these sports in 2014 than they did in 2008.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear overview of rising expenditure and football’s continued dominance, supported by several accurate start and end figures. Its main limitation is imprecision in the participation trends, especially describing athletics as a steady rise and overstating the football range; prioritize reporting the sharp athletics jump and exact comparative values from the graphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and relevant figures cover both graphs, but some participation trends and values are imprecisely reported.
Highlight athletics’ sharp rise after 2010 and report football’s actual range of roughly 8 to 9 million.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses logically from the overview to expenditure and participation, although presenting everything in one paragraph weakens organization.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview, spending trend, and participation comparisons.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and generally clear, but collocations such as “reached to” and “took this activity” reduce precision.
Use natural data-reporting phrases such as “reached,” “rose to,” and “participated in swimming.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful range of sentence structures is evident, though agreement, preposition, and tense errors recur without obscuring meaning.
Check singular-plural agreement and maintain past tense consistently when describing the historical figures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below show the average monthly expenditure on children’s sports and participation in different sports in the UK from 2008 to 2014.
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