The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.
Sample Response
The bar graph presents data on the United Kingdom’s annual investment inon clean energy between 2008 and 2015. OverallAs is obvious, the UK investment in clean energyUK budget on eco-friendly energy increased over the period and wind power received considerable investmentgot a considerable attention within the overall totalin terms of the grant it received. As the data suggests, the UK authorities invested nearly £2.5 billionfinanced nearly two and half billion pound in 2008 to generate eco-friendly power and about half went tohalf of it went on the wind power sector. Next year budget for wind power almost trebled while a small portion was spent on energy smart technologies and solar power. More than £7 billionMore than 7 billion was invested in the UK in 2009in 2009 in the UK to generate clean energy and total investment rose towhich went as high as £15 billion in 201515 billion in 2015. The investment in next two years, 2010 and 2011, remained alike but more than one-third was disbursed for the solar power. From 2012 to 2015, the UK spent roughly £3–4 billion annuallyroughly 3-5 billion yearly to produce solar energy. The UK government mainly invested inon wind and solar power in the later yearsin later years and energy-smart technologies received a small, steady shareenergy smart technologies attracted a steady portion of UK clean energy investment throughout the period.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response's strongest feature is its clear account of the overall rise in clean-energy investment and the prominent role of wind and solar power, supported by several relevant totals. Its main limitation is precision: wind did not merely treble in 2009, solar did not exceed one-third in both 2010 and 2011, and smart-technology investment was not steady throughout. The priority is to verify each stacked component before describing its trend.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and overall investment totals are broadly accurate, but several claims about individual energy categories are overstated or unsupported by the bars.
Check each coloured segment year by year and distinguish total investment from the separate solar, wind, smart-technology, and other components.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses coherently from overview to early and later years, although all information is compressed into one paragraph.
Separate the overview from two chronological detail paragraphs and compare related categories within each period.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of trend and investment vocabulary is used, but collocations such as "investment on," "got attention," and "financed two billion" are imprecise.
Use natural forms such as "investment in," "accounted for," "allocated," and "£2.5 billion was invested."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is consistently clear through varied sentence structures, but article, preposition, possessive, and unit-form errors recur.
Proofread noun phrases such as "two and a half billion pounds," "the following year's budget," and "investment in wind power."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.
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