The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.
Sample Response
The pie chart shows the proportions of different household typesdata on the different family types living below the poverty lineunder the poverty line in the year 20022001 in the UK. As is presented in the graph, sole parents and single person without children were the highest in percentages who lived in the destitute condition in the UK in 2002. DeleteAccording to the pie chart, people in the UK who were poor mostly belonged to the sole-parent categoryfell under sole parent category in 2002. This was the highest proportionThis was the highest, at 26%more than one quarter, among the listed household typesgiven categories of families who lived in povertypaucity. The second largest group living in poverty wassegment who were needy were single people without childrenthe single person without any child and the figure was 24%their percentage was 24%. Couples with children had 15% poverty rate while it was less than 10% for single aged people, aged couple and couples with children. In 2002In this year, 14% of all householdshousehold in the UK lived in povertywere living in poverty. Interestingly, aged people had less percentage of poverty and couples with children enjoyed better economic condition than the couples without children.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response correctly identifies sole parents and single adults without children as the two largest groups and accurately reports several headline proportions. Its main limitation is factual reliability: the chart is from 2002, the under-10% list should include couples without children, and the final comparison reverses the 15% and 9% rates. Prioritise matching every label to its slice before drawing comparisons, then simplify awkward poverty-related wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview and several correct figures are provided, but the wrong year, a mislabeled category, and a reversed comparison materially reduce accuracy.
Use 2002 consistently and distinguish couples with children at 15% from couples without children at 9%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information generally progresses from the largest groups to smaller shares, but repetition and the absence of paragraphing weaken clarity.
Present one concise overview, then group the two highest categories separately from the remaining household types.
Lexical Resource
The response uses varied poverty vocabulary, but several choices such as "lived in paucity" and "less percentage" are unnatural or imprecise.
Prefer standard expressions such as "living in poverty", "poverty rate", "household category", and "a lower proportion".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted, but agreement, plural, article, and relative-clause errors recur throughout the report.
Check singular and plural household labels and ensure percentages agree grammatically with the categories they describe.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.
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