Line graph The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.
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Sample Response
The line graph illustrates the amount of wood products in the UK from 1980 to 2000.
The production of paper and packaging saw a continuous increase, remaining the highest categorystanding at the highest position over the entire period. In addition, there was a switch in the position of sawn-wood and wood-pulp, with the former’s figure declining throughout the perioddecreasing nonstop and the latter’s remaining broadly stable overallthe latter’s remaining relatively unchanged
In 1980, the UK produced around 230240 million tonnes of paper and packaging, compared to around 170 million tonnes of wood pulp200 million tonnes of wood pulp and around 200175 million tonnes of sawn-wood. Ten10 years later, the production of paper and packaging rose slightly to 250 million tonnes while the other two figures dropped to the same levelpoint of 150 million tonnes.
In 2000, the amount of paper and packaging leaped to a high of 350 million tonnes while sawn timbersawnwood saw a continual drop in production to just over 125 million tonnes. The production of wood pulp, on the other hand, recovered and exceeded the figure for sawn-wood by roughly 30 million tonnes.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is clearly structured, presents a useful overview, and describes the 1990 and 2000 figures with strong grammatical control. The main weakness is inaccurate reporting of the 1980 values, especially the reversal of wood-pulp and sawn-wood production; the highest priority is to verify each series against the legend and check every starting figure before writing comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the three principal trends, but the 1980 wood-pulp and sawn-wood figures are reversed and several starting values are inaccurate.
Match each line carefully to the legend and report the 1980 figures as roughly 230, 200, and 170 million tonnes for paper, sawn wood, and wood pulp respectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically through an overview and chronological detail paragraphs, with comparisons integrated smoothly.
Preserve this organisation while linking the corrected starting values more explicitly to the later crossover between wood pulp and sawn wood.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of trend vocabulary, although phrases such as "highest position", "decreasing nonstop", and "same point" are not fully natural or precise.
Prefer precise graph language such as "remained the highest", "declined steadily", and "converged at 150 million tonnes".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of sentence structures is used accurately, and the few slips do not impede communication.
Proofread sentence endings and punctuation, particularly the missing full stop after the overview paragraph.