Line graph The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the production of three forest-industry productsproduction of forest-based industry in the UK from 1980 to 2000between 1980 and 2000.
Overall, Deleteit can be seen from the graph that the production of paper and packaging increased significantlyexperienced a significant increase during the 20-year period, while sawn-wood and wood-pulp production declined overallwhile the opposite pattern was true for the production of sawn-wood and wood pulp. And also, the manufacture of paper and packaging had the greatest position among the three mentioned ones.
From 1980 to 1990In the first ten years, paper and packaging productionthe amount of paper and packaging produced went up slightlyslightly went up, from 230 to 250 million tonnes. From 1990 to 2000Thereafter, the figure rose sharplysuddenly climbed to 350 million tonnes, which is 100 million tonnes higher than the previous figurealmost one-and-a-half greater than the former number.
By contrast, production declined overall forHowever, the story was different when it comes to the production of sawn-wood and wood pulp. Starting at 200 million tonnes in 1980, the production of sawn woodamount of sawn-wood product saw a gradual decrease to 150 million tonnes by 1990 and continued to fall to only 130 million tonnes in the next ten yearsonly 130 in the next ten years. The pattern of wood-pulp productionwood pulp’ production is more complex. The figure fell from 175 to 150 million tonnes by 1980, whereas over the following decade, it recovered to 160 million tonneswhereas in the remaining period, it recovered and increased to 170 million tonnes.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear overview, organises the three products effectively, and selects the principal changes with generally accurate figures. Its main limitation is imprecision in the wood-pulp account, including the mistaken date for its low point and an inaccurate final value, while several collocations are awkward. Prioritise checking each series against the graph and expressing comparisons in more natural academic language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and most values are accurately reported, but the wood-pulp low point is assigned to the wrong year and its final figure is overstated.
Check the wood-pulp series carefully and report its fall to 150 million tonnes in 1990 followed by a recovery to about 160 million in 2000.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and product-based detail paragraphs create clear progression, though a few linking expressions are conversational or slightly mechanical.
Use direct comparative transitions and integrate the final two series without phrases such as ‘the story was different.’
Lexical Resource
There is a useful range of trend vocabulary, but several collocations, including ‘greatest position’ and ‘one-and-a-half greater,’ are imprecise.
Choose conventional expressions such as ‘remained the highest’ and ‘rose to roughly one and a half times its initial level.’
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence structures with generally clear meaning, but recurring article, possessive, agreement, and phrasing errors reduce accuracy.
Proofread noun phrases and possessives, and keep grammatical structures concise when comparing values across years.