The diagram below illustrates the UK immigration, emigration and net migration during 10 years from 1999 to 2008.
Sample Response
The chartdiagram depicts levels of immigration, emigration and net migration in the UK over the decade between 1999 and 2008. Overall, immigration figures significantly exceeded emigration figuresthe number of immigrants outnumbered emigration figures significantly, with both showingboth witnessing an upward trend over the given period. In addition, net migration remained relatively stable and increased slightly, peaking in 2004 and 2007 before dropping back to around 160,000 in 2008peaking in 2004 and 2007 before falling to its original level.
Regarding the number of immigrants, it rose from 450,000 to 510,000 by 2003, before reaching almost 600,000 in 2004 and remaining close to that level thereaftersurging to nearly 600,000 and experiencing moderate fluctuations. Emigration increased by 100,000 from 300,000 by 2006, followed by a drop to around 340,000 in 2007, before rebounding to roughly 420410,000. When it comes to net migration, it fluctuated narrowly between 150,000 and 170,000 from 1999 to 2003levelled out at 150,000 between 1999 and 2003, after which it peaked at nearly 250,000 in 2004 and reached a secondary peak of around 240,000 in 2007.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear, well-structured overview and accurate data points for all three categories shown in the chart. Sentences are logically linked with appropriate paragraphing and smooth transitions between categories. To make further progress, expand slightly on key numerical comparisons to comfortably meet the target length while maintaining the precise control of grammar and vocabulary demonstrated here.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response highlights main trends and accurate key figures effectively, though the slightly short length prevents a more fully fleshed-out report.
Elaborate further on final-year comparisons or exact net migration data to ensure all key features are thoroughly developed while meeting expected length targets.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically with smooth transitions and an easily identifiable overall trend.
Maintain this effective paragraphing while ensuring connecting phrases remain natural and varied.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is flexible and precise, using range-appropriate reporting verbs and dynamic vocabulary effectively.
Continue using a natural variety of numerical and trend expressions to avoid overusing standard phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures show strong control with accurate grammar and complex clause combinations throughout.
Keep producing error-free complex sentences while extending descriptive details slightly.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below illustrates the UK immigration, emigration and net migration during 10 years from 1999 to 2008.
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