The diagram below illustrates the UK immigration, emigration and net migration during 10 years from 1999 to 2008.
Sample Response
The diagram below illustrates the UK immigration, emigration and net migration during 10 years from 1999 to 2008. OverallObviously, the numbersamounts of people who immigrated and emigrated to and from the UK rose slightlyin the UK are rises slightly during these 10 years. Moreover, net migration fluctuatedthe number of net migration people is swing up and down with moderate variationswith a little change. Net migration reached its highest point in 2004, while the lowest figure was recorded in 2003. Net migration figures were generally higher each year from 2004 to 2007 than in other years. Regarding immigration, the number of arrivalsFirst, the number of people immigrating rose slowly over these ten years, from about 450 thousand to nearly 600 thousand. It increased by almost 100 thousand between 2003 and 2004.ImmigrationThe number of immigration stayed almost unchanged at 510 thousand from 2002 to 2003. Secondly, theThe number of emigrants had only small changes from 1999 to 2006. It plummetedplummetted from 400 thousand to 320 thousand in 2007, and then surged from 320 thousand to 420 thousand in 2008. Finally, net migration remained relatively stable overallthe net migration people had no change duringdruing 10 years about 180 thousand180 thousands people.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The report effectively identifies the main trends in UK migration over the ten-year period and includes an overall overview. However, the response is limited by inaccurate data descriptions, contradictory statements regarding net migration, and frequent grammatical errors that obscure meaning. To improve performance, ensure all data points are double-checked against the visual prompt and focus on correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends are identified and an overview is provided, but there are notable data inaccuracies and contradictory claims about net migration.
Cross-check all figures and trend descriptions against the chart to ensure complete accuracy and eliminate self-contradictions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses paragraphing and basic sequence markers logically to structure the overall description.
Vary cohesive devices beyond simple list sequencers like 'First', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' to create a smoother narrative flow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to describe basic trend directions, though errors in word choice, count collocations, and spelling are noticeable.
Use correct quantifiers such as 'number of people' rather than 'amounts of people' and review trend vocabulary spellings.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent tense, verb form, and structure errors occur throughout the text, occasionally making meaning unclear.
Practice forming simple past tense structures accurately and avoid combining auxiliary verbs with base forms incorrectly.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below illustrates the UK immigration, emigration and net migration during 10 years from 1999 to 2008.
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