The chart below shows the number (thousands) of four kinds of students in the UK in 1990, 1998 and 2005.
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The chart illustrates the figures for four categories of studentsThe chart illustrates the figure for four kinds of students in the UK over three periodsperiod(1990, 1998 and 2005).
Overall, it is clear that the number of all kinds of students experiencedhad experienced a sharp rise. In addition, male full-time studentsmales-full time students had the largest in both 1990 and 1998, overtaken by the figure for females-full time in 2005.
With regard to the figure for males-full time, before rising dramaticallyclimbing wildly to 800 thousandthousands in 2005, it experienced a slight increase from 200 thousand to approximately 300 thousandfrom 200 thousands to approximately 300 thousands over the first eight years. Similarly, the figure for female full-time and female part-time studentsfemales-full time and females-part time shared the same trend (from 190 thousand to roughly 820 thousandfrom 190 thousands to 810 thousands and from 100 thousand to 800 thousandfrom 100 thousands to 800 thousands, respectively.)
By contrast, the number of male part-time studentsmales-part time declineddiclined mildly from about 160 thousand in 1990180 thousands in 1990 to approximately 100 thousand in 1998100 in 1998, after which it surged to approximately 760 thousandsurged to 780 thousands over the last seven years. Nonetheless, this groupBut the figure for it was still the smallest apart from in 1990.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay successfully identifies key trends and provides an overview with relevant comparisons across the given years. However, inaccuracies in numerical expression and grammatical control reduce the overall clarity. To improve, focus on correcting sentence structure errors and reporting visual data units accurately.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and main trends are highlighted, though there are minor inaccuracies in unit descriptions.
Ensure all numerical data units, such as thousands, are written consistently and accurately throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into paragraphs with a clear progression from overview to specific details.
Use cohesive devices more naturally to avoid repetitive linking phrases when contrasting figures.
Lexical Resource
A fair range of vocabulary is used to describe trends, though some word choices and collocations are awkward.
Replace informal or over-dramatic expressions like 'climbing wildly' with standard academic trend vocabulary such as 'increasing sharply'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Attempts at complex structures are visible, but frequent grammatical errors and typos occur across sentences.
Practice checking subject-verb agreements, plural forms, and prepositional phrases after writing.