The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995–2002.
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The bar chart compares the amount of time spent by people in the UK on three different types of phone call between 1995 and 2002.
It is clear that calls made via local fixed-linelocal, fixed lines were the most popular type, in terms of overall usage, throughout the period shown. The lowest figures on the chart are for mobile calls, but this category also saw the most dramatic increase in calluser minutes.
In 1995, people in the UK used fixed lines for a total of just under 75 billion minutesjust over 70 billion minutes for local calls, and about half that figurehalf of that amount of time for national or international calls. By contrast, mobile phones were only used for around 4 billion minutes. Between 1995 and 1999,Over the following four years, the figures for all three types of phone call increased steadily.
By 1999, the amount of time spent on local calls on fixed linesusing landlines had peaked atreached a peak at 90 billion minutes. After 1999,Subsequently, the figure for this category fell, but the rise in the other two types of phone call continued. In 2002, the number of minutes of national and internationalnational / international landline calls reached approximately 61 billion,passed 60 billion, while the figure for mobiles rose to around 45 billion minutes.
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