The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
Sample Response
The pie chart illustrates the concept of receiving the funds from the children’s charity located in the United Nations for over a year.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that donated food accounted for the majority of the income, while programming services and concrete for the most expenditure.
In detail, donated food provides maximum revenue for the teenager charity with shares at 86% similarly, the highest source of expenditure one category program services which accounted at 95.8%. Other sections were much smaller. Following this, community contribution second-largest revenue source, bringing in 10.4%.this was followed by program revenue at 2.2%.
Moreover, investment income and government grants had similar earnings with shares at 0.2% and 0.4% of the profit on by charity from other income sections. It is interesting to note that there were only two others expenditure items.
Fundraising and management and general accounting for 2.6% and 1.6%, respectively. Therefore the total amount of profit was 5356 1580 dollars, and the total consumption of the fund was 532 24864dollars. It seems that charity had more income as compared to expenditure.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use precise chart language Original: concept of receiving the funds Suggested revision: charity's revenue Why it matters: The chart presents sources of revenue rather than a concept of receiving funds.
- 2. Correct the location Original: Nations Suggested revision: States Why it matters: The task states that the charity is located in the USA.
- 3. Match the time period Original: for over a year Suggested revision: over one year Why it matters: The charts cover one year, not a period longer than a year.
- 4. Use the chart label Original: programming Suggested revision: program Why it matters: The expenditure category is labelled Program Services in the visual.
- 5. Restore the verb Original: concrete Suggested revision: accounted Why it matters: The clause needs the verb phrase accounted for to express the proportion.
- 6. Describe the largest share Original: provides maximum revenue Suggested revision: provided the largest share of revenue Why it matters: This comparative phrase accurately describes donated food's position among the revenue sources.
- 7. Use the correct noun Original: teenager Suggested revision: children's Why it matters: The task refers to a children's charity, not a charity specifically for teenagers.
- 8. Correct the percentage Original: with shares at 86% Suggested revision: at 86.6% Why it matters: The revenue chart gives donated food as 86.6%.
- 9. Repair the clause Original: one category program services which accounted at 95.8% Suggested revision: was program services, which accounted for 95.8% Why it matters: The original phrase lacks a verb and uses the wrong preposition with accounted.
- 10. Add the missing verb Original: community contribution second-largest revenue source Suggested revision: community contributions were the second-largest revenue source Why it matters: A plural subject and finite verb are needed to form a complete clause.
- 11. Capitalize the new sentence Original: .this was Suggested revision: . This was Why it matters: The word beginning a new sentence must be capitalized.
- 12. Use the adjective form Original: others Suggested revision: other Why it matters: Other, rather than others, modifies the noun phrase expenditure items.
Suggested Rewrites
- concept of receiving the funds charity's revenue
- Nations States
- for over a year over one year
- programming program
- concrete accounted
- provides maximum revenue provided the largest share of revenue
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s clearest strength is its overview, which identifies donated food and program services as the dominant categories and notes that income exceeded spending. Its main limitation is unreliable detail: several percentages are rounded or reversed, the totals are badly malformed, and some descriptions become unclear. The highest priority is to copy figures and category names accurately from the charts, then compare them in controlled, grammatically complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and most major categories are included, but the report misstates the setting, reverses two small revenue figures, and seriously distorts both totals.
Check every label and number against the charts, especially 86.6%, the two minor income sources, and the total revenue and expenditure.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a recognizable overview-to-detail sequence, although linking is sometimes mechanical and several incomplete or poorly joined sentences interrupt the flow.
Group revenue and expenditure details into two focused paragraphs and use connectors only where the logical relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource
Relevant terms such as revenue, expenditure, grants, and fundraising show some range, but frequent inaccurate choices and collocations sometimes obscure meaning.
Use precise chart-report phrases such as accounted for, contributed, and totalled, and avoid unsuitable terms such as teenager charity and consumption of the fund.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied structures, but frequent omissions, agreement errors, fragments, and faulty sentence boundaries reduce clarity.
Build complete comparison sentences with explicit subjects and verbs, then proofread punctuation, spacing, articles, and verb forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
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