The bar charts below provide information about honey production and honey producing colonies in the five American states in 2006.
Sample Response
The bar chartschart provides data regarding the number of bee colonies in five American states in 2006. The data further compares the amount of honey produced by those colonies, measured in millions of poundsthe capacity of honey production of the same colonies in millions of pounds. Overall, North Dakota ranked first ascame at the top of the list as the highest honey-producing state, and also hadas well as having the largest number of bee colonies. On the other hand, Wisconsin produced the least honeywas the lowest honey producer and had the fewest bee coloniesthe least number of bee colonies among all five states. According to the data, in 2006, 350 thousand bee colonies were recorded in North Dakota. In terms of productionConsequently, this state produced the most honeymost of the honey came from this state, more than 25 million pounds. Surprisingly, South Dakota’s honey production was relativelysignificantly low (roughly 10 million pounds) even though this state hadhosted the second-highest number of bee coloniesthe second-highest bee colonies, approximately 225 thousand. Montana, which had approximately 130 thousandthousands of bee coloniesprovinces, was slightly higher than that of Minnesota’s. In terms of honey production, these two states produced almost equal amounts of honeythese two states generated an almost equal amount of honey in 2006, 10 million pounds each. Besides, Wisconsin registered the lowest number of bee communities, slightly above 50 thousand and produced around 5 million pounds honey, the least among all.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear overview, accurately identifies the highest and lowest states, and covers the main figures and comparisons from both charts. Its main limitation is imprecise wording in several descriptions, including awkward terms for bee colonies and a faulty comparison involving Montana and Minnesota. Prioritise precise data-reporting collocations and grammatically complete comparisons to make the account more consistently accurate and natural.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents an accurate overview and selects the principal figures and comparisons across both charts, with only minor imprecision.
Distinguish carefully between having the highest output and producing a majority, and state close values with exact comparative wording.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped and progresses clearly from the overview to the major and then smaller states, with generally effective linking.
Use connectors such as 'consequently' and 'besides' only when their logical relationship precisely matches the adjoining statements.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of vocabulary for describing quantities and comparisons, though several collocations are inaccurate or unnatural.
Replace expressions such as 'bee provinces' and 'bee communities' with the precise term 'bee colonies' and use 'honey-production capacity' accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of sentence structures is used with generally good control, but several errors in comparison, plural form, and noun phrasing remain noticeable.
Correct forms such as '130 thousand colonies,' 'the number in Minnesota,' and 'five million pounds of honey.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar charts below provide information about honey production and honey producing colonies in the five American states in 2006.
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