The chart shows the percentage of individuals living alone across five distinct age categories in the United States from 1850 to 2000. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.
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Sample Response
The bar chartcharts illustrates the proportion of American solo dwellers in five age groups between 1850 and 2000.percentage of individuals living alone across five distinct age categories in the United States from 1850 to 2000.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of the 55-64 age groupgroups shows the highest figure, while.While the 17-26 age bracket shows the lowest percentagepercent.
In 1950,Regarding in 1950, the proportion of people agedage 27-36 stood at around 3% but then in 2000 it went up to 8%.Similarly,the 17-26 age group in 1950 the percentage of individualsindividual living alone started at 1.9%1,9% .Then in 2000 it increased significantly to around 5% .
Turning to the 37-46 age category, the percentagecategory the percent of people living alone did notdidn't change tooto much from 1850 to 1950, but then it rose to 13%1950,butthen it reached a peak of 13% in 2000.Next, the 55-64 age group showed the highest figure overall, starting at 3% and then climbing to 17% byNext the 55-64 age group shows the highest of all years started at 3% and then climb to 17% in the end of the period.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The essay successfully attempts to describe key details from the chart and provides an overview identifying high and low categories. However, the report omits one of the five age brackets entirely and suffers from frequent grammatical mistakes and sentence fragments. To improve, cover all data groups systematically and focus on sentence structure accuracy and spacing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
An overview is provided, but key details are incomplete as the 47-54 age category is entirely omitted from the description.
Ensure all categories presented in the visual prompt are explicitly mentioned and compared in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Cohesion is attempted using basic linking expressions, but sentence fragments and faulty punctuation disrupt the logical flow.
Avoid starting subordinate clauses with connectors like 'while' as standalone sentences, ensuring every sentence contains a complete main clause.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary range is limited and contains noticeable errors in word form, spelling, and spacing, such as 'to much' and missing spaces after punctuation.
Practice using varied lexical phrases for statistical trends while ensuring correct spacing and standard decimal formatting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement mistakes, fragment sentences, and incorrect preposition usage.
Review basic sentence construction to eliminate fragment clauses and ensure consistent past tense verb forms when describing historical data.