The chart below shows the relative percentage of different types of cheese production in the USA.
Sample Response
The pie chart shows comparative dataa comparison data on cheese production in the USA. OverallAs is obvious, Cheddar and MozzarellaCheddar and Mozzarella brands are two leading types of cheeseleading cheese makers in the United States. According to the given illustration, Cheddar accounts forCheddar manufactures more than one-third of total cheese productionthe total cheese in the US market while the second-largest share belongs tothe second position in terms of cheese production is held by Mozzarella, which is an Italian cheesean Italian cheese manufacturer. The latter accounts for just over 30%makes slightly over 30% of all cheese in the USA. All other Other American cheeses account forUS cheese manufacturers supply just over 8.8% of production8 percent of cheese demands while a similar proportion of cheese is produced by other Italian cheesesother Italian cheese makers. Swiss cheese accounts forSwiss cheese makers supply the lowest proportion of cheese in the USA, accountingin the USA which accounts for marginally less than 3% of the total. Finally, all other cheeses collectively account forall other cheese producers cumulatively make just over 13.1% of production13% of the demand. In summary, US cheese production is led by two varietiescompanies – Cheddar and Mozzarella, and the remaining varietiesall other manufacturers have about one-third of productionaround a quarter production share in the US market.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response reports most percentages accurately and clearly highlights Cheddar and Mozzarella as the two largest segments, using a generally fluent range of comparative language. Its main limitation is a systematic misreading of cheese types as brands, companies, or manufacturers, compounded by an inaccurate final claim about the remaining share. Describe the chart categories exactly as labelled and verify every summary calculation before writing the overview.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most proportions and the two leading categories are reported accurately, but cheese types are repeatedly misidentified as producers and the final combined-share claim is inaccurate.
Describe every segment as a type or category of cheese and check that the four smaller categories total about one third, not one quarter.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses clearly from the two largest shares to the smaller ones and ends with a summary, but the single-paragraph presentation limits structural clarity.
Use separate introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs, grouping the two dominant categories apart from the four smaller segments.
Lexical Resource
A reasonably varied comparative vocabulary is used, though repeated references to brands, makers, and manufacturers are inaccurate for the chart.
Choose category-accurate terms such as cheese type, segment, share, and production proportion, and avoid treating product labels as companies.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally good control, and the remaining grammatical errors are occasional and non-impeding.
Refine article and noun-phrase accuracy in expressions such as comparative data and a quarter of production, and check relative-clause reference.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the relative percentage of different types of cheese production in the USA.
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