The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
Sample Response
The line graph presents data on vehicle theft cases in Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada from 1990 to 1999. As is obvious, car thefts in Great Britain were higher than that of other countries while this rate noticeably increased in Sweden. According to the diagram, roughly 17 vehiclestransportations in every thousand were stolen in Great Britainin the Great Britain in 1990 while this rate was between 6 to 8 per thousand in France, Canada and Sweden. Vehicle theftAutomobile embezzlement in Great Britain steadily climbed till 1993 at which point 2% of cars2% cars were reported stolenabducted. With some minor fluctuations, car-theft ratescar lifting rates in France and Canada remained almost constant throughout the years. In contrast, vehicle-theft ratecarrier stealing rate in Sweden rose overallkept on soaring and in 1995 this proportion reached as high as 10 in every thousand vehicles. Motor vehicle theft in Great Britain sharply declined in 1994 but grew again till 1997 to reachstrike 2% again. Afterwards, car theft incidents in Great Britain firmly declined between 1997 and 1999 when it actually increased in Sweden. By 1999Finally, in 1999, about 1.6% of vehiclesalmost 1.5% automobiles in Great Britain and 1.4% in Swedenin Great Britain and Sweden were reported stolen while it was almost one-third of that in France and Canada.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report identifies the dominant position of Great Britain and the sustained rise in Sweden, and it includes enough figures to convey the main patterns. Its main weakness is imprecise reporting, especially the inaccurate final comparison and several forced synonyms for vehicles and theft. Prioritise exact visual comparisons and use standard chart vocabulary instead of repeatedly replacing key terms with unnatural alternatives.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and most major trends are reported, but the 1999 comparison is inaccurate and some movements are oversimplified.
Check every stated figure against the graph and compare final values separately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses chronologically, though the single dense paragraph and repeated transitions limit clarity.
Separate the overview from two grouped detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
There is range, but many substitutes for vehicle theft are unnatural or inaccurate.
Use precise recurring terms such as vehicle theft rate rather than forced synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of structures is generally clear, with recurring article, preposition and noun-phrase errors.
Proofread articles, comparison forms and percentage constructions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
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