The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005
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The three pie charts illustrate the proportion of four vehicle categoriesfour kinds of vehicles used in the UK over a 40-year period in three specific years: 1965, 1985, and 2005between 1965 and 2005.
Overall,it is clear that the usage of the other three categories saw overall decreasesnearly all types of vehicles followed a downward trend ,while a significant increase can be observed in the figure for private cars, which remained the dominant mode of transport throughout.private cars in the same period.
In 1965,the percentage of private cars stood at 40%was40%,and this figure rosemounted to 55% in 1985,and then reached a peak of 60% by 2005increased by 5% in the following 20 years.
The usageueing rate of public transport experienced a slight decline from 25% to 20% in 1985a slight decline in 1985,before recovering slightly toafter which it back to 22% in 2005.Similarly, the proportionrate of recreational vehicles also decreased from 15% in 1965 to 5% in 1985,before partially rebounding to 8% in 2005.and then reached 8% in 2005.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response successfully presents a clear overview and accurate data points for most vehicle types, demonstrating a logical structure. However, the report remains under length and completely omits one key category from the body paragraphs: lorries and other commercial vehicles. To improve performance, ensure all major visual categories are covered and expand on details to meet the word count requirement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
An overview is provided, but one major vehicle category is entirely omitted from the data paragraphs, and the report is under length.
Describe all four vehicle categories clearly, including lorries and other commercial vehicles, to ensure complete coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organized logically with clear overall sequencing, though some paragraphing transitions are slightly basic.
Use a wider range of linking devices to connect data comparisons across paragraphs more naturally.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but noticeable spelling errors and mechanical typos appear in the text.
Proofread carefully to fix typos like 'ueing' and leave spaces after punctuation marks.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple structures are mostly accurate, but grammatical slips in verb phrases and missing spaces affect structural accuracy.
Ensure correct verb forms are used in past-tense descriptions, such as changing 'it back' to 'it went back'.