The table shows the amount of total waste produced in million tonnes in six different countries in three years.

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Sample Response

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The table compares the waste production in six different countries in three different years. Overall, the US alone produced more waste in these years than the rest of the countries did combinedin combination. According to the table data, Canada produced 20 million tonnes of wastelitter which was exactly twice that ofdouble than that of Ireland and Poland. The waste production in Japan was 15 million tonnes. Scotland produced the least amount of wastegarbage which was only 3 million tonnes. These five countries together were responsible for producing 58 million tonnes of wastewastage which was almost half of the wastewaste products in the USA. In 1992Next year the waste generation in the US increased to 150 million tonnes, an increase of about 40%almost a fifty percent increase, while Poland, Canada and Scotland managed to reduce their waste outputreduce it. The most significant decreaseimprovement was in Poland in terms of waste production - from 10 to below 3 million tonnes over four yearsin 4 years. Finally, in 2000, waste production in Ireland, Poland, Japan, Canada and Scotland was 9.9, 18, 25, 29 and 5 million tonnes respectively and it is obvious that all these countries have been successful to check their waste production. However, the USA in thatthis year generated more than 200 million tonnes of wasteleftovers while the rest of the countriesthe rest of countries together produced less than 87 million tonnes of waste.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response establishes the United States as the dominant waste producer and supports the chronological comparison with a wide range of accurate figures. However, it wrongly concludes that all five other countries controlled waste by 2000, although four recorded increases from 1988, and its single-paragraph format weakens grouping. The priority is to base the overview on verified overall trends and divide the yearly details into logical paragraphs.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

The dominant US figures and most yearly data are accurately selected, but the final claim about all five other countries controlling waste contradicts the table.

Next step

State the broader trend accurately: US waste rose sharply, and most of the other countries also ended higher in 2000 than in 1988.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The chronological ordering is easy to follow and comparisons are connected clearly, but the lack of paragraphing weakens the grouping of information.

Next step

Place the overview in its own paragraph and divide the detailed figures into two logically grouped body paragraphs.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

A reasonably wide vocabulary is used, but substitutes such as litter, wastage, waste products, and leftovers are imprecise in this statistical context.

Next step

Use waste and waste production consistently, reserving variation for accurate verbs such as produced, generated, rose, and fell.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A varied range of complex sentences is handled with generally good control, although a few errors such as double than and rest of countries remain.

Next step

Refine comparison structures and articles by using twice that of and the rest of the countries.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The table shows the amount of total waste produced in million tonnes in six different countries in three years.

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