You are going on a short training course at a college in Green mount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: - explain your situation - describe the accommodation you require - say when you will need it You should write at least words.
Sample Response
Dear Sirsir, I am writing to inform youThrough this epistle, I want to inform you that I am coming to Ireland to attend a training coursefor some training purpose atin your college, so I am looking for a favor from you.
I am shifting after that a fortnight with my family for few months, and I need a rented apartment in which i need two bedrooms, a hall and a kitchen along with study room. In addition to this, please make sure the apartment is nearmust be near a market and a gymthe market and Gym because I am very health-consciousconscious about my health.
Please let me know about the weather conditionscondition also so that I can pack my clothes accordingly. Most importantly, give some information about food as I am a pure vegetarian, so is it easy to arrange some vegetarian food otherwise I will pack some preserved edibles from here to cook that food for some days after reaching there. Moreover, which mode of transportation is convenient for me to travel from college to home. BesidesExcept this, please suggest what would be useful for megive some suggestions what things are beneficial for me and tell me about anything you think I have forgotten to aski forgot to ask you about.
I look forward toLooking forward for your replycooperation.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response communicates the need for accommodation and supplies useful details about the requested apartment, which gives the letter a recognisable purpose. However, the required timing is unclear, substantial space is spent on unrelated questions, and frequent awkward or inaccurate structures reduce precision. Prioritise the three requested points, state the arrival and accommodation dates explicitly, and edit sentence boundaries, articles, and prepositions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The situation and accommodation needs are addressed, but the required timing is unclear and several unrelated requests distract from the purpose.
State the exact arrival date and required rental period clearly, then remove questions that do not help secure accommodation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a basic sequence, but long sentence chains and mechanical linking make progression uneven.
Organise one paragraph around each requested point and divide run-on sentences into shorter, logically connected units.
Lexical Resource
The letter shows some range, but inappropriate or inaccurate choices such as ‘epistle’, ‘shifting’, and ‘preserved edibles’ recur.
Choose natural, direct wording for a formal request and check common collocations related to moving, accommodation, and transport.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors with articles, prepositions, sentence boundaries, and capitalisation reduce control.
Focus first on constructing complete sentences and checking articles and prepositions before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going on a short training course at a college in Green mount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:
- explain your situation
- describe the accommodation you require
- say when you will need it You should write at least words.
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