You are going on a short training course at a college in Green mount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: - explain your situation - describe the accommodation you require - say when you will need it You should write at least words.
Sample Response
Dear Sirsir,
I am writing this letter to seek help from you in order to arrange accommodation near Greenmount College in Northern Irelandnear college Greenmount, North Ireland.
I am Vikas Kanda, and I work asprofessionally I am an accountant. I have been in this profession for 10 years. My company has offered meMy company offered me a training course at Greenmount Collegeat college Greenmount for one month. Due to mya hectic work schedule and lack of local contactslack of personal contact, I have found it difficultI found it difficult to arrange accommodation. As such, I would like to request you to find a suitable place for me.
Well in case of adjustment, I am very cooperative: however, in the case of living, I am very reserved. I am looking for a one-bedroom apartment with a separate kitchen and bathroom. Preferably, it shouldwill be close to the training venue. Most importantly, my company provides me with a budgetprovides me a budget of $1500 specificallyspecially for accommodation. So, the arrangements should reflect this budgetarrangements should be accordingly.
I will arrive on 2 Aprilland on 02 April at 9 a.m.by 9 in the morning, and I will be at the accommodation office as soon as possible to collect the keyscollect keys and complete the remaining formalitiesfulfill the rest formalities.
I am looking forward to a positive responsehoping for optimistic feedback from you.
Yours faithfully, Vikas KandaYours Faithfully, Vikas Kanda
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter clearly explains the training situation, specifies suitable accommodation, and provides a useful arrival date, with each requirement placed in a logical paragraph. Its main limitation is a pattern of unnatural vocabulary and some grammatical imprecision despite generally clear meaning. The highest priority is to use more idiomatic formal wording and refine sentence accuracy when describing preferences, budget, and arrival arrangements.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are covered with relevant detail, and the formal tone is generally appropriate.
Specify the exact accommodation period alongside the arrival date and remove minor background detail that does not help the request.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear sequence and uses focused paragraphs, though some transitions within paragraphs sound mechanical or awkward.
Link preferences and budget constraints more smoothly, using fewer formulaic introductory phrases.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes varied, but noticeable collocational errors make several formal expressions sound unnatural.
Use standard phrases for accommodation preferences, a company-provided budget, completing formalities, and awaiting a response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is handled with reasonable control, although punctuation, articles, and a few constructions remain inaccurate.
Check sentence punctuation and article use, and recast clauses whose structure depends on awkward phrases such as case of adjustment.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going on a short training course at a college in Green mount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:
- explain your situation
- describe the accommodation you require
- say when you will need it You should write at least words.
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