You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. Write a letter of invitation to the MP's secretary, Mrs Shelton. In your letter, introduce your committee say why you are having the meeting invite the MP to attend
Sample Response
Dear Mrs Shelton, I am an organising member of the non-profit organisation 'Our Green Planet', writing on behalf of our foundation and community members to invite the honourable MP, Mr Alex Cooper, to attend a conference about green areas on 21st December 2021 at Grand Replicon Hall. I am hoping that you would inform the honourable MP regarding the meeting and schedule his time for the same. We are proud to have a delegate who represents us in the parliament and is an advocate of the green movement. As a founding member of the 'Our Green Planet', I deem him the best person to have a discussion with the local citizens in this regard. 'Our Green Planet' has started its journey in 2016 and working to increase awareness about the green movement. Our organization has been highlighted in numerous national and international events and publications. 21 st December will be our 8th anniversary of this wonderful journey and we would like to make it special by focusing on our goal, spreading awareness among people about how individual steps can make our planet a better place to live in. We would be highly motivated if the honourable MP can spare some of his precious time and attend the meeting to discuss his views on that. We are expecting him to stay for an hour. It would be so kind of you if you could inform our respected MP about the invitation and explain to him how important it is for us to have him. Thanks in advance. Yours faithfully, Laura Matthew
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Natural noun phrase Original: I am an organising member Suggested revision: I am a member of the organising committee Why it matters: This is the standard way to describe the role.
- 2. Missing verb Original: writing on behalf Suggested revision: and am writing on behalf Why it matters: The opening sentence needs a smoother link between identity and purpose.
- 3. Unnatural phrase Original: schedule his time Suggested revision: check his availability Why it matters: You check or arrange someone's availability; schedule his time sounds awkward.
- 4. Article use Original: in the parliament Suggested revision: in Parliament Why it matters: In this context Parliament is normally used without the article and capitalised.
- 5. Tense error Original: has started its journey in 2016 Suggested revision: started its work in 2016 Why it matters: Use past simple for a completed starting point in 2016.
- 6. Missing verb Original: and working to increase Suggested revision: and has been working to increase Why it matters: The clause needs an auxiliary verb to be grammatical.
- 7. Date format Original: 21 st December Suggested revision: 21st December Why it matters: There should be no space inside the ordinal number.
- 8. Formal tone Original: spare some of his precious time Suggested revision: spare an hour of his time Why it matters: Precious time sounds overly deferential; the specific duration is clearer.
- 9. Unclear reference Original: his views on that Suggested revision: his views on protecting local green areas Why it matters: That is vague; repeat the topic for clarity.
- 10. Task wording Original: attend a conference about green areas Suggested revision: attend a local committee meeting about green areas Why it matters: The task asks for a committee meeting, so use that wording rather than conference.
- 11. Natural title Original: honourable MP Suggested revision: Mr Alex Cooper MP Why it matters: This is a more natural way to refer to the MP in a formal invitation.
- 12. Sentence rewrite Original: I am an organising member of the non-profit organisation 'Our Green Planet', writing on behalf of our foundation and community members to invite the honourable MP, Mr Alex Cooper, to attend a conference about green areas on 21st December 2021 at Grand Replicon Hall. Suggested revision: I am a member of the organising committee of the non-profit organisation 'Our Green Planet', and I am writing on behalf of our foundation and local community to invite Mr Alex Cooper MP to a meeting about local green areas on 21st December 2021 at Grand Replicon Hall. Why it matters: This improves grammar and makes the invitation purpose clearer.
Suggested Rewrites
- I am an organising member I am a member of the organising committee
- writing on behalf and am writing on behalf
- schedule his time check his availability
- in the parliament in Parliament
- has started its journey in 2016 started its work in 2016
- and working to increase and has been working to increase
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The letter introduces the committee, explains the meeting, and invites the MP through the secretary. The purpose is clear, although the event details sometimes become wordy and the exact discussion focus could be sharper.
State the invitation details early, then briefly explain why the MP's contribution is needed for local green areas.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a logical flow, but it is one long paragraph and some ideas repeat the importance of the MP. Cohesion is adequate but not always efficient.
Use clear paragraphs for introduction, meeting purpose, invitation details, and closing request.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is suitably formal and topic-specific, with some less natural collocations such as schedule his time and precious time.
Use formal but direct invitation language, such as check his availability and attend as a guest speaker.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most sentences are understandable, but tense and clause-control errors occur in longer sentences.
Simplify long sentences and check verb tense when describing the organisation's history.